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Sarah Horan

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Sep 20, 2012
 
The moment i saw her I knew it may be the end of us two. But I couldn't afford to think like that! I knew she would make it! I had to believe, have hope and faith! I sit in a nearby chair and hold her hand. It feels smooth and frail in my hands.
"Liam we have to leave." it was Niall from the doorway. "Liam co'mon shell he better In the morning. You need sleep."
"Okay." I responded all tired sounding. The truth is I didn't really wanna go away but I knew Niall was right.

At the doorway I look back, but I don't see a girl who is all torn up or badly damaged, I see a beautiful soul and an angel. I KNEW she would be better. But, the next day it seemed I was wrong.

Hey, guys this is my first fanfic so hope u enjoy I may like stoop if I don't get a lot of comments.:) But anyway yeah hope you guys like it!:)

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Sep 20, 2012
 
you broke my heart in your writing wich is why i love it its amazayn!!!!Continue plz!!!!
Sarah Horan

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Sep 20, 2012
 
Kenzi Carter_Fizzy wrote:
you broke my heart in your writing wich is why i love it its amazayn!!!!Continue plz!!!!
I hav school but after I'll write more!:) Thks for your comment!:)
Sarah Horan

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Sep 20, 2012
 
"what do you mean she's gone!?!" I shouted.
"I'm sorry for your lose. I really am it's just their was nothing we could do. She died in her sleep." the doctor tried to add sympathy when he talked but it didn't cut it. Then he add," I'll let u be alone for a minute." and with that walks out I the room. I Stan there gazing upon what used to be my angel. My life. And now, the life is gone out of here. I feel something cold and wet slide down my face. I was crying.:( This wasn't happening! I started screaming, "She can't be dead, she just can't! She was my life! My world! Nothing could separate us!" I was carried out by guards because it was said that I was making the other clients worry/be uncomfortable.
Once outside I call Louis to pick me up. I wait in te freezing rain for a matter of 10 minutes before I see Louis' car pull around the corner. I hop in a tell him to step on it.
Kk. I will write more later.:) hope u guys liked it.:) Leave comments!

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Sep 20, 2012
 
Omg i rlly love it again im heart-broken...and again its still amazayn please continue as soon as you can im hooked!!
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Izzy Marquez luvs nandos

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Sep 20, 2012
 
OMB!! Plz keep going!! Do u need any characters?

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#8
Sep 20, 2012
 
can i b in it if not thats fine!!
Sarah Horan

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Sep 20, 2012
 
Hey guy I'll try to post something but I'll be celebrating wit my friends at the fair about 1Ds new song!:))
Sarah Horan

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Sep 21, 2012
 
"So how is she?" Louis asks me.
"She's dead."
"Oh, I'm so sorry man. I didn't know."
"It's okay. Thanks for picking me up though. I had walked to the hospital instead of driving."
"No problem. So....."
I didn't know what to say, so for the rest of ride home I stayed silent. When we reached the house I opened the door and went straight to my room. I looked at an album with all the pictures I had of Amber and me. She was so nice and loving to nature. How could I be so careless! I started to cry again, but as I cried I fell asleep.

Kk. Sorry I took me so long to post another part. Hope u like

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Sep 22, 2012
 
Heart broken again!!! i love it
Sarah Horan

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Sep 22, 2012
 
The next morning I went downstairs for breakfast. But i was expecting to just eat my cereal alone, instead all the boys were up. Harry making pancakes. Niall eating cocoa puffs. Zayn eating some toast. And Louis, he was, well let's just say he was licking the rest of the pancake mix off the spoon.
"Hey, buddy. Want some cereal?" Niall asked me.
"Well, I....."
Niall cut me off. "Well, too bad cause I got your cereal already!"
I smile at Niall and head over to the table. I wa about to enjoy my cereal when I noticed I was using a spoon!!

Kk! So I'll try to post another part tonight.:) please leave comments.
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#14
Sep 22, 2012
 
I love it! It's very good and I feel very bad for Liam. Poor Liam! Please write more soon!
Emily

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Sep 22, 2012
 
Keep going
Sarah Horan

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Sep 22, 2012
 
Thks for all of ur houses comments! Really appreciate it!:D

"Niall! You gave me a spoon!" Was it not bad enough that I was sad! Now he hastily make me mad too! My face started turning red with rage!
"Wow! Liam calm down I didn't know! Sorry I wasn't paying attention!"
I look around me as I say, "Sorry just that..."
"Amber?" Harry says not looking at me, but concentrating more on flipping the pancakes.
"Yeah." I say exhausted.
"Hey, dude don't worry. We're here for you. Remember the tine Alexa was my girlfriend, and she got killed in a fight?" Zayn said. I still remember that. About a month or two months ago. Zayn was dating a very pretty girl, but she got into alot of fights. Zayn told her to stop, cause he didn't want her to get hurt. But, she only agreed to stop, if zayn would stop smoking.

Kk srry it kinda short. Will post more later or try to :)
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Sep 22, 2012
 
Please write more soon! It's really good!
Jennifer Loves Liam

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Sep 22, 2012
 
It's great. Can I be Liam's new GF or are you gonna be her???
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Sep 22, 2012
 
Please write more
Sarah Horan

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Sep 22, 2012
 
Jennifer Loves Liam wrote:
It's great. Can I be Liam's new GF or are you gonna be her???
I'll think about it.:) But give me a description first.:)
Jennifer Loves Liam

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Sep 22, 2012
 
Sarah Horan wrote:
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I'll think about it.:) But give me a description first.:)
Blonde-red hair. Blue eyes. I love to dance and play flute and be with friends. Things I like about Liam: he's nice, funny and not to mention cute.
Sarah Horan

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Sep 23, 2012
 
Jennifer Loves Liam wrote:
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Blonde-red hair. Blue eyes. I love to dance and play flute and be with friends. Things I like about Liam: he's nice, funny and not to mention cute.
I'll try to see we're you'll come in. But srry If I can't hav u be Liam's gf but I can try to put u in te story.:)

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