School Zone ~Fanfic~

“Love me or leave me”

Since: Aug 12

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#43 Oct 6, 2012
This is so amazing!!!

I'm not trying to be rude but, to make your fanfic a little bit easier to read, you should indent your diologue. Do you know what I mean??? It's just a suggestion to make it easier to read. I'm not saying that you have to do it and I hope that I did not offend you!

I love your fanfic... btw thanks again for putting me in it!!!
Kennedy Stylinson

Oshawa, Canada

#44 Oct 7, 2012
LLN! "QUEEN BITCH TO YOU PESANT!" I was laughing so much that it was one of those silent ones where you look like a retarded seal clapping and my mom took the iPad from me because she thought I was having a heart attack!

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Since: Aug 12

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#45 Oct 7, 2012
Kennedy Stylinson wrote:
LLN! "QUEEN BITCH TO YOU PESANT!" I was laughing so much that it was one of those silent ones where you look like a retarded seal clapping and my mom took the iPad from me because she thought I was having a heart attack!
omg I try to make the fanfic have a little humor

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Since: Aug 12

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#46 Oct 7, 2012
Part 7
Dreams do come true!

"The girls are already inside come on we can sneak through the back" Louis said
We all followed louis to the back of the stadium he pushed the door open and led us to were the people sit and wait for there names to be called there izzy,tori,alesha and kelesy all waited for us me and the lads run to them and sit in our save seats
"you got the lyrics for the song?" Izzy asked
"yeah right here!" I said I pull out our lyrics we were gonna sing say somethin by austin mahone

(im a fan of him not a mahomie I dont have time to learn stuff about him im already dedicated to 1D)
"Sweet lets rehearse over there!" Tori said pointing to an empty spot I pull my ipod and speaker out and plug it up I click the song the music starts
"I see you walk by extra fly baby where ya goin can I roll?" I start out
"oh oh oh" the girls sing back up
"living beach life feelin right your the hottest everybody knows" tori sings
"Say somethin if ya feelin the vibe! Say somethin baby dont be so shy,say somethin! Cause your all in my head like oh oh oh oh yea yeah" me and the girl sing unison by the end of the song everyone claps "
One direction,New status!" We heard our name called the girls and the boys get up we head backstage
"one direction first" the man said we all give our boyfriends good luck kisses then they went off

*15 mins later*
We watched on the screen to see what simon would say the rest of the judges said yes
"Well boys you seem like a couple of nice lads...i say yes" simon said with a smile
the boys jumped up and down me and the girls scream and jump the boys run backstage we kiss our boyfriends
"New status" the man said we head on stage
"hello new status what will you sing today?" Brittany said
"say somethin by austin mahone" I said the music started
Close to the end the crowd is clapping to the beat
"hey baby tell me sometin lady I gotta know whats up I gotta know it right now; hey baby tell me sometin lady I gotta know whats up I gotta know it right now" izzy sang then alesha
"say somethin! If ya feelin the vibe! Say somethin baby dont be so shy! Say somethin cause your all in my head like oh oh oh oh yeah yeah" we all singed the crowd clapped and roared
"you were so energetic and adorable yes from me" demi said
"you seem like the next pop icon..so its a yes" brittany said
"the song fit great with your energy and personalities so yes from me" L.A Reid said
"i can already teens rocking out to you so yes from me" simon said
Me and the girls scream and jump the boys come on stage and hug us
"these your girlfriends?" Demi said
"yes, yes they are" Niall said
"your very lucky" demi said with a smile
"i know very lucky" niall said and smiled at me

3 comments hoped you enjoy im gonna go listen to say somethin for the 30th time
Kennedy Stylinson

Oshawa, Canada

#47 Oct 7, 2012
Ahhhh! You made it! Hurray :)
Juliet

Springdale, AR

#48 Oct 7, 2012
I LOVE IT!!
Lindy

Garner, NC

#49 Oct 7, 2012
Your an AMAZAYN writer!

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Since: Aug 12

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#50 Oct 7, 2012
Lindy wrote:
Your an AMAZAYN writer!
omg thank you
Tori_Tomlinson

United States

#51 Oct 7, 2012
Looks like you took my advice!!! Haha this is such a good fanfic! I like the X factor parts!!! Keep going

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Since: Aug 12

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#52 Oct 7, 2012
Ok so like u guys I need help im like so blank right now im skipping through bootcamp so Im gonna put like *couple months later* <~ cause who wants to hear about boring boot camp so like I need ideas and whoever idea I like the most gets to be JOSH THE SEXY BEAST WITH HUGE BICEPS girlfriend!!!!! So make them good I will notify the winner they must prepare a audition AFTER I notify you NOT when you submit your idea ok tanks!:)

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Since: Aug 12

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#53 Oct 7, 2012
Tori_Tomlinson wrote:
Looks like you took my advice!!! Haha this is such a good fanfic! I like the X factor parts!!! Keep going
yes I did does it make more sense now? And thank you so much! And awwe thanks
Bree Styles or Horan

Christchurch, New Zealand

#54 Oct 7, 2012
It's pretty cool:)!
Mona

Edmonton, Canada

#55 Oct 7, 2012
Ahhhhhhh I love it so much good job erin!!!!!!
My favorite part "Zayn while your at it turn your gay off" and "that's queen birch to you peasent". HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHA!!!!!! I died lol

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Since: Aug 12

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#56 Oct 7, 2012
one last thing should I add more bitchy zayn moments or less and is my humor in the story funny or pathetic?

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Since: Aug 12

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#57 Oct 7, 2012
Mona wrote:
Ahhhhhhh I love it so much good job erin!!!!!!
My favorite part "Zayn while your at it turn your gay off" and "that's queen birch to you peasent". HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHA!!!!!! I died lol
omg thank you mona! Im writing right now!
Mady

New Brunswick, NJ

#58 Oct 7, 2012
Moe
Izzy Marquez luvs nandos

Rancho Cucamonga, CA

#59 Oct 7, 2012
1D_Foreveryoung1 wrote:
one last thing should I add more bitchy zayn moments or less and is my humor in the story funny or pathetic?
more bitchy Zayn moments and it is not funny.... IT'S FREAKING WORTHY OF THE HOD OF FUNNY!!
Mona

Edmonton, Canada

#60 Oct 7, 2012
1D_Foreveryoung1 wrote:
<quoted text> omg thank you mona! Im writing right now!
your soooo welcome and YAY and yes more Zayn bitchy moments its not funny nor pathetic its HILARIOUSSSSSS *singy song voice*:DXx
Izzy Marquez luvs nandos

Rancho Cucamonga, CA

#61 Oct 7, 2012
Izzy Marquez luvs nandos wrote:
<quoted text>more bitchy Zayn moments and it is not funny.... IT'S FREAKING WORTHY OF THE HOD OF FUNNY!!
*GOD
Mona

Edmonton, Canada

#62 Oct 7, 2012
Izzy Marquez luvs nandos wrote:
<quoted text>*GOD
what?

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