My rap- plz tell me whatcha think

My rap- plz tell me whatcha think

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Eyybuddy

Brooklyn, NY

#1 Apr 20, 2011
My first, just rapped quick. Please tell me what ya think!

You say im the greatest, you say im the best.
You say im so great, but f* it dont matter.
I lose to the rest.
You say im amazing
Im like no one else
Say im made for you
Yet i sit on the shelf
All by myself
Lonely and cold no support or no help.
Call it life but its mine
But i rhyme
And you shine
Its sublime
Your outta yo f*ckin mind
Or am I outta mine?
But f*ck it im over you
And onto the next
Still second best 
Or even third or even worse but lets forget the rest
It hurts my chest
Remembering how things were
In the golden days 
look through the haze
Is it not clear enough?
You wouldnt get it anyways
Movin on
Another song
Another rap
F*ck it b*tch im done with your crap!
These b*tches crazy 
Gettin lazy?
Shit doesnt even faze me
Its amazin
How you changed me
Almost crazy
Babe you made me,
Who i am
Oh god damn
Here we go again.
Down this road
Its too long
I dont belong
On my own
With out you
I just hope you know its true.
WhiteFury

United States

#2 Apr 23, 2011
ive been sitting here trying to figure out what to say and all i could come up with is

i cant wait to never read this sh*t again.

Since: Oct 11

Van Nuys, CA

#3 Oct 11, 2011
Well it seems good I understand it,all u need now is the melody good luck ;) let's c how it sounds when it's heard on da radio
mc dino

Cuyahoga Falls, OH

#4 Nov 2, 2011
there's a lot of emotion in there but i would suggest using a more complex rhyme scheme. and i felt what you said about the golden days. back then it didnt matter if you had all the money in the world. if you didn't have skills you weren't shit. peace be to ya bro.

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