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#84 May 10, 2013
Keeping this page alive *charges* CLEAR!

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#85 May 10, 2013
Chapter thirteen

"Flashes"

It's weird when you feel like you are dead, everything was bright and beautiful I kept seeing all the beautiful moments I've lived in my life. Jessie, all my friends and ruby, a kiss, the warmth of her body, her beautiful smile, the night we met. Everything was so warm, so beautiful, so perfect. I was so happy, then all of a sudden I felt like something kicked me in the chest, then another, until...
"He's all good"
What the hell? That's when I woke up. I could barely breathe I saw flashes of everything, lights, faces these were the men that were trying to save me. I passed out again still waking and passing out, flashes of lights this time the lights were different six lights in a neat circle.
"Scalpel" I heard a man say
"He's awake" said another
"Gas him" said the first man I felt a warm feeling coming over me and passed out again, seeing her hair blowing in the breeze.
I woke up, and felt where the bullet hit me. It was shit I felt so fucked and tired even though I was passed out for days. I felt something in my hand, it was warm and comforting, I looked over and saw ruby passed out on the bed, her red hair sprawled all over me, holding my hand and her makeup ruined by what looked like tears. I squeezed her hand as tight as I could with all my strength then fell back in dream land I didn't know when I was going to be awake but I knew everything was going to be alright. Ruby was with me, I was going to be fine...

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#86 May 10, 2013
Romantic New Age porn. Not bad kid. Not bad ;p

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#87 May 11, 2013
Ashelah wrote:
Romantic New Age porn. Not bad kid. Not bad ;p
I'm trying not to make it into a prono.

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#88 May 11, 2013
Chapter fourteen

"Breath"

Man it hurt to breathe as I woke up ruby was awake looking at me, tears still rolling down her beautiful face.
"Hey" I said, man it hurt to talk but I tried to move up the bed a bit, groaning in pain as I got up. Ruby grabbed me
"Relax babe ok? You were shot" she said
"Fuck you think?" I said to her with a smile
She chuckled a bit "now I know how you felt babe" squeezing my hand it was so hard to breathe but every breath was worth it, ruby was here she never left me. Like I never left her.
"I wanted to ask you something before you left" she said holding something in her hand "I remembered our three years"
"So did I" I said "I was trying to get you a bottle if that stuff you like."
"Well I had something different in mind" she said as she showed me what was in her hand, it was a pair of rings, gold bands with our names engraved on it "I know this is the worst place to do it but I couldn't forgive myself, I wanted to ask you before you left" she pulled out one of the bands and places it on my finger. I looked down at it, a small tear running down my face and just smiled.
"Yes" I said without thinking it she had tears of joy as she hugged me crying. I would never scare her like that again, she meant the world to me and I would never let her go.

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#89 May 11, 2013
Dam, I've been waiting at McD's.. and for naught...LOL!

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#90 May 11, 2013
Fairy Verte wrote:
Dam, I've been waiting at McD's.. and for naught...LOL!
Haha ;)

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#91 May 11, 2013
hello?? anyone here?

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#92 May 13, 2013
boobs

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#93 May 13, 2013
Dante infernox wrote:
boobs
Is this a knock knock joke?

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#94 May 13, 2013
Fairy Verte wrote:
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Is this a knock knock joke?
yeah it is look
knock knock
whos there?
boobs
*i put my face in those boobs and motor boat*
i also got the refrance of the knock knock joke you did haha XD ilys

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#95 May 13, 2013
Dante infernox wrote:
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yeah it is look
knock knock
whos there?
boobs
*i put my face in those boobs and motor boat*
i also got the refrance of the knock knock joke you did haha XD ilys
oooooh *blushing*

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#96 May 13, 2013
Fairy Verte wrote:
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oooooh *blushing*
haha ill motor boat you soon ;) give me a sec hahah

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#97 May 13, 2013
Dante infernox wrote:
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haha ill motor boat you soon ;) give me a sec hahah
Shew! I need a towel :)

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#98 May 13, 2013
Dante infernox wrote:
Hey guys, this is just an idea page for a novel I'm hoping to start. I'm welcome to all criticisms constructive or otherwise. I'm hoping this will form the story I'm writing more productive and the idea popular.
Great story Dante. I really enjoyed reading it. I have always wanted to write a novel . You might describe the characters better. Make us feel like we really know them make us feel what they are going though every one of their emotions pain fear love happiness.

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#99 May 13, 2013
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<quoted text>Great story Dante. I really enjoyed reading it. I have always wanted to write a novel . You might describe the characters better. Make us feel like we really know them make us feel what they are going though every one of their emotions pain fear love happiness.
Thanks! I had some prologues about each character but I didn't put them up for a reason because it had an explanation about my personal life and I thought I shouldn't put that up here. The "characters" are actually real people ruby,(who's real name I will not say) Jessie my best friend and myself. Just as a precaution I've excluded the prologues, if this story does blow up I need enough to write a book, it is currently in writing progress and this is a rough story (I.E plot holes the size of rocks) I'm hoping with the community's help I could make it readable and enjoyable thank you for reading it is really appreciated.

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#100 May 13, 2013
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<quoted text>Shew! I need a towel :)
Ohh baby ;)

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#101 May 13, 2013
I think you should proceed with your novel, you've got a good start.

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#102 May 13, 2013
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I think you should proceed with your novel, you've got a good start.
Thanks babe!

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#103 May 15, 2013
still need some advice... writers block here...

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