SRD vs RapRook (Prepare to Die Edition)

SRD vs RapRook (Prepare to Die Edition)

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“Life's a monopoly”

Since: Nov 13

Houston

#1 Apr 15, 2014
Let's get this started so it can end quick.
RapRook

Stourport, UK

#2 Apr 15, 2014
So I'm spitting first?
How many bars?
Let's do this.

You wear me out merely by your crap spurring out of your mouth, your comments
They make me gag, I'm choking trying not to laugh, my sense of indulgence overpowers me and my eyes go watery as I recall your responses you posted back to me
I got no obligation to abide by your stuffed up rules, free society (socially) freedom of speech, equality all point to you having no right to slate me for speaking my views
You consider yourself a pro status when it comes to rapping
Instead you're a disaster unravelling
In with mid-collision as I speak
There's going to be a smile on my face when Karma starts it's happening (process)
Seems you're not swearing at me anymore
Well that's baffling
You can finally say a sentence without using synonyms for poo wee and lovemaking
That's astonishing
It seems to me you're turning into a good guy sort of, less of the dark side let the light flow through you with the bright side
My hands go together I feel the urge to congratulate you then something tugs at my mind
I stop and realize it's all lies
You swore at me last time you said something to me
My bad
RapRook

Stourport, UK

#3 Apr 15, 2014
That was a 16 bar.
SomeRandomDude

United States

#4 Apr 15, 2014
That was a 16? Lmao

Someone tell me how many bars works, because a 16 against that would be devestating for him.

“reverbnation.com /evolusean”

Since: Feb 14

CANADA

#5 Apr 15, 2014
um...raprook...u kinda gotta type in bars so we know exactly what ur sayin...cuz i cant rly find a flow in that big paragrph...plus i dont think all that adds up to 16 bars tbh...maybe 12 lol but not 16. a 16 would be alot longer. unless u got some short @ss bars that im grouping together? lol idk. but yeah...
example from my most recent demo:

as the blood drips from his KNIFE, and his knuckles turn to WHITE,
he cant make anyone love him but he sure as helI can take his LIFE,
etc. etc.

that was ONE bar. writing this way is alot easier then just nonstop paragraph. thats legit advice too!

Since: Oct 13

Location hidden

#6 Apr 15, 2014
Btw raprook posted that before and shuffled a little of he's words around/he should post something new.
RapRook

Stourport, UK

#7 Apr 15, 2014
lil biggy wrote:
Btw raprook posted that before and shuffled a little of he's words around/he should post something new.
That's cuz he ignored it but if you want different I'll number my bars.

1)Deity title, living it up high life, women every day, looking down on the rough, calling them peasants isn't going to get you anything when they come at you with homemade knives in a swarm at your crown
2) when you're contemplating on what you're going to implement when you see your delusion of being crowned king, singing in your head, they're out side your door sighing at the insanity of it all
3) You bribe the Priest to give you liberties, but in his mind, he wants liberties, nowt in it for him so he seeks help from your worst found enemies, bad move
4) Goes behind your back, looks around for a pressure spot, anything to convict you of crap
5)Knife in your draw, why do you have to be to unfortunate, you get slaughtered
6) Discovery of the body they jeer and they shout, they spit on your corpse and no one volunteers to lay a hand on you for bad luck
7) Funeral they're all attending, but now for lamentation, they're taking the crap out of you.
8) I watched this from the side-lines, waiting for the moment when you'd be gutted alive and eaten as a ritual sacrifice
9) And I laughed with elation and exhilaration at the sight of you done for
10) They say Satanism is mental but when it comes down to you it's worth it just in case. You're pure evil.
RapRook

Stourport, UK

#8 Apr 15, 2014
Is that better?
Not my best but it's freestyle
SomeRandomDude

United States

#9 Apr 21, 2014
Rap Rook claims poetic texts written, but where do you think I started from. Let's imagine the imagery of my infinite imagination. Why, because you do not even have the basics of poetry down tinsel fairy.

Writing cryptic dicrepet messages festering, but too delicate for epitaphs of extreme neurotics
A Phsycotic Skyzophrinic, Bi-Polar with Exo-Visions, highly livid with anti-phsycotics
I'm insanely speratic, yes insane, now grab it, back hand it and trash it with your clastic passions
Passed I haven't, past I have none, plastered yeah run, I'm your havoc now get your smash-on!
Go ahead and whine about your lack of poly-syllables while I call for more of these pills local
'Cause I'm tricky and I sickle giving deformaties on a cellular level, your blood is a level this post holds
Do I really need a full ten full, let alone sixteen it's not even suspenseful, nor sensual, it's emotionless
Because SomeRandomDude winning they could care less, so I get careless it's like the Ocean Left
So there is no way to get in over my head, guess it's straight disasterious, so I'm now roasting Death!
I finished two bars and scorched Rook until there was nothing left, so this is just an extra empty threat
You want to dig, well there is plenty of extra depth! Your intellects, I will always check and test!

Since: Oct 13

Location hidden

#10 Apr 21, 2014
Lol really this need no votes I'm sure a few regulars seen this and didn't vote "like me" because there is only one winner ... SRD.....Rap rook you still a rook'ie and maybe next time don't bark with no bite ....

“RRC (previous name).”

Since: Jun 13

Huntsville

#11 Apr 21, 2014
Shit rook was fried alive lmao, that's pitiful rook step your game up before you challenge somebody again.

“RRC (previous name).”

Since: Jun 13

Huntsville

#12 Apr 21, 2014
Sh*t rook was fried alive, step your game up before you challenge somebody again.
SomeRandomDude

United States

#13 Apr 23, 2014
He does NOT get out of it that easy.

There WILL be voting and it WILL be a staple
to pull out to show how deep it was.

Flow -
Metaphores -
Similes -
Wordplay -
Punchlines -
Originality -
Vocabulary -
Multies -
Nameplay -
Rhyme Scheme -
Enjoyment -

Out of 100

You don't just battle me as a Rookie and get away that easy. When I battle the Rookies, I make an example out of them.

Since: Oct 13

Location hidden

#14 Apr 23, 2014
Okay this is my first time I'm voting on srd's....battle. So its hard I guess ...

RapRook

FLOW : 2
METAPHOR: 1. Can't find any
SIMILIES: 1. Can't find any
WORDPLAY : 1 Can't find any
PUNCHLINES: 1-2 did you write any? if you did no impact
ORIGINALITY : 2 I know its your personal spin on rap but it felt like you where recalling a movie or something ?
VOCABULARY : 4 some word I like
MULTIS : 1
NAME PLAY : 1 nope
RHYME SCHEME : 1 no comment

ENJOYMENT : hard to read no real rhyme

(15-16/100)

Comment : you shouldn't worry about getting noticed right now ...you should worry more about improving

Btw even if there was nothing It didn't feel right giving you a zero especially because I'm still working

SomeRandomDude

I think there was a lot of stuff I didn't understand...

FLOW : 6
METAPHOR : 6
SIMLIES : 1 I'm not sure if you wrote any. Quote some if you did?
WORDPLAY : 8 iv found some good ones but I had to look deep I'm impress PUNCHLINES : 8 you used all 3 forms as far as iv seen ...timeless law ...metaphor...and bold statement
ORIGINALITY : 8 your spin is insane
VOCABULARY : 7
MULTIS : 6
NAME PLAY : 2 I see you using he's name but that's it ..
RHYME SCHEME : 7 I'm not good at pointing it out

ENJOYMENT : first few times it was hard reading this intellectually... But then it gets intriguing

(59/100)
I think you did better than this
I'm not sure if I saw everything and that's why I don't vote usually

Comment : Awesome battle..... overkill

“RRC (previous name).”

Since: Jun 13

Huntsville

#15 Apr 23, 2014
lil biggy wrote:
Okay this is my first time I'm voting on srd's....battle. So its hard I guess ...

RapRook

FLOW : 2
METAPHOR: 1. Can't find any
SIMILIES: 1. Can't find any
WORDPLAY : 1 Can't find any
PUNCHLINES: 1-2 did you write any? if you did no impact
ORIGINALITY : 2 I know its your personal spin on rap but it felt like you where recalling a movie or something ?
VOCABULARY : 4 some word I like
MULTIS : 1
NAME PLAY : 1 nope
RHYME SCHEME : 1 no comment

ENJOYMENT : hard to read no real rhyme

(15-16/100)

Comment : you shouldn't worry about getting noticed right now ...you should worry more about improving

Btw even if there was nothing It didn't feel right giving you a zero especially because I'm still working

SomeRandomDude

I think there was a lot of stuff I didn't understand...

FLOW : 6
METAPHOR : 6
SIMLIES : 1 I'm not sure if you wrote any. Quote some if you did?
WORDPLAY : 8 iv found some good ones but I had to look deep I'm impress PUNCHLINES : 8 you used all 3 forms as far as iv seen ...timeless law ...metaphor...and bold statement
ORIGINALITY : 8 your spin is insane
VOCABULARY : 7
MULTIS : 6
NAME PLAY : 2 I see you using he's name but that's it ..
RHYME SCHEME : 7 I'm not good at pointing it out

ENJOYMENT : first few times it was hard reading this intellectually... But then it gets intriguing

(59/100)
I think you did better than this
I'm not sure if I saw everything and that's why I don't vote usually

Comment : Awesome battle..... overkill
You didn't vote right but this voting system actually isn't bad...
SomeRandomDude

United States

#16 Apr 23, 2014
The Ocean lines are metaphoric similes.
SomeRandomDude

United States

#17 Apr 23, 2014
I love the suggestive Styx lines.

Since: Oct 13

Location hidden

#18 Apr 24, 2014
What did I do wrong I took the whole day! It wasn't the spur of the moment thing

Since: Oct 13

Location hidden

#19 Apr 24, 2014
The ocean lines I took as a punchline with set up... Timeless law .... Saying the ocean left, while you rap, so i was guessing its was just for him there /so there's no way it getting over your head ...like it went over he's .. The timeless law for me was if its useless (the battle) you can feel like you underwater or the water over your head its a figure of speech
SomeRandomDude

United States

#20 Apr 24, 2014
SomeRandomDude wrote:
Rap Rook claims poetic texts written, but where do you think I started from. Let's imagine the imagery of my infinite imagination. Why, because you do not even have the basics of poetry down tinsel fairy.
Writing cryptic dicrepet messages festering, but too delicate for epitaphs of extreme neurotics
A Phsycotic Skyzophrinic, Bi-Polar with Exo-Visions, highly livid with anti-phsycotics
I'm insanely speratic, yes insane, now grab it, back hand it and trash it with your clastic passions
Passed I haven't, past I have none, plastered yeah run, I'm your havoc now get your smash-on!
Go ahead and whine about your lack of poly-syllables while I call for more of these pills local
'Cause I'm tricky and I sickle giving deformaties on a cellular level, your blood is a level this post holds
Do I really need a full ten full, let alone sixteen it's not even suspenseful, nor sensual, it's emotionless
Because SomeRandomDude winning they could care less, so I get careless it's like the Ocean Left
So there is no way to get in over my head, guess it's straight disasterious, so I'm now roasting Death!
I finished two bars and scorched Rook until there was nothing left, so this is just an extra empty threat
You want to dig, well there is plenty of extra depth! Your intellects, I will always check and test!
Things that are in that singular bar.
A re-hash of my opener.
I am losing it, seeing Death and getting manic, then reversing back to depression. I represent this with,'It's disasterous.' I also mention seeing the Ocean Left or,'That the Ocean Left,' should have done more to express that. I also talk about his Ocean if pool of thoughts, ideas, opinions left. I gave him a brain fart. I also express another re-hash in the NEXT bar. When I refer to scorching Rook until there is nothing left, I mentioned that I was roasting death. This also refers to Rook, as I said I finished him in the first two bars. Which cremation without relatives consent is a serious desrespect. Then I refer to this bar AGAIN in the last bar, when I say, "You want to dig?" Well there is always extra depth. Which processes back to the drained water, you cannot just exmerge yourself easily into the depths of my writing, as I don't write down watered ideas. I write more under the surface and you have to dig, which refers to the lack of water and the ground you must dig through, instead of plunging into the depths of watered ideas. I ALSO, used it as a metaphore AGAIN, referring to having no compettition left. Then you have the normal figure of speech, which was and still is ALSO a simile. Which this is ALSO mentioned about the insity of my writing and the ideas, when people grab my writing, backhand the thoughts and trash the work I put in. While your own passions in life I continue to chip away at, this refers to the few people who whined about me taking the drive to rap away. Plus MUCH MUCH MORE!

Do you UNDERSTAND the compelxity that I have told everybody I have had repeatedly yet? What is never noticed? What is always thrown out of the window?

I keep pushing to get the top layer relatable. However, you leep digging and it just keeps going. Just think! That is only SIX BARS! See why I have such a hard time writing as much as the rest of you? I have SERIOUS amount of information intertwined within the whole darn thing!

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