SRD vs. Rapking
Shini

Korea

#1 Feb 23, 2013
I don't know who keeps flaggin the tourney rooms but it's annoying.

Anyways go ahead and drop your 4 bars here.
Some Random Dude

United States

#2 Feb 23, 2013
Iight, I'll get mine out Sunday
Shini

Korea

#3 Feb 24, 2013
Some Random Dude wrote:
Iight, I'll get mine out Sunday
Alright thanks. I'll have to check it Monday my time.
Some Random Dude

United States

#4 Feb 24, 2013
Look at this Horse I'm the King of Rap bring
The Trojan plastic 'cause it's a w'rap' King

Undeniable and undefendable scat scenes
I sh*t on these Kings my *ss gun gatling

The King of Queens that just got backed see
I just snapped an' made blood bath scenes

Battling R.K. like a drowned S.A.T. Screen
Why even bother he's just black beamed
XxRap_KingxX

New York, NY

#5 Feb 24, 2013
Ill post tommorow
XxRap_KingxX

New York, NY

#6 Feb 24, 2013
This is just the beggining i got beast mode on equip,
You being a vet is just like a greek myth,

Im the orchastra, your just a weak synth,
Been doing this since 11, you been missing every beat since,

Im the principal so i spit shit with intentions,
This is my school grounds so how the fack could i get suspended,

I am the real king and the guy that 'Sucks Random D1ck' just got facked verbally,
My shit goes tighter than a pair of suburban jeans.
~
Some Random Dude

United States

#7 Feb 24, 2013
The middle two were decent, the first and fourth missed.
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#8 Feb 24, 2013
SRD (4 bars)

Look at this Horse I'm the King of Rap bring
The Trojan plastic 'cause it's a w'rap' King

The set up was kind of weak to be honest, but the punch was solid. The multi feels a little forced here.(4/5)

Undeniable and undefendable scat scenes
I sh*t on these Kings my *ss gun gatling

Nice vocab, set-up, and punch here plus vivid imagery.(Eww!) This is simple, yet very effective.(5/5)

The King of Queens that just got backed see
I just snapped an' made blood bath scenes

I think you are talking about cards and gay people here. I don't completely know because the set-up to this bar was a little awkward. Killer punch though.(3/5)

Battling R.K. like a drowned S.A.T. Screen
Why even bother he's just black beamed

Both set-up and punch are awkward on your final bar.(2/5) Since it is still a punchline bar.

Final score 14/20
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#9 Feb 24, 2013
XxRap_KingxX wrote:
This is just the beggining i got beast mode on equip,
You being a vet is just like a greek myth,
Im the orchastra, your just a weak synth,
Been doing this since 11, you been missing every beat since,
Im the principal so i spit shit with intentions,
This is my school grounds so how the fack could i get suspended,
I am the real king and the guy that 'Sucks Random D1ck' just got facked verbally,
My shit goes tighter than a pair of suburban jeans.
~
This is just the beggining i got beast mode on equip,
You being a vet is just like a greek myth,

This is not a punchline bar.(0/5)

Im the orchastra, your just a "weak synth",
Been doing this since 11, you been missing "every beat since",

This however is. Not bad set-up and punch with metaphores in both.(4/5)

Im the principal so i "spit shit with intentions",
This is my "school grounds" so how the fack could i "get suspended",

About the same metaphorically. Punch is a little weak though. This is gloating. You want to be dissing your opponent every bar.(2/5)

I am the real king and the guy that 'Sucks Random D1ck' just got facked verbally,
My shit goes tighter than a pair of suburban jeans.

4th bar is a total miss because it is just a decent diss and not a punchline bar.(0/5)

(6/20) No hating. You didn't get the worse score. You just need to work on some angles, but SRD takes this one in my opinion.
Some Random Dude

United States

#10 Feb 25, 2013
The 3rd bars was from King of Queens T.V. show.

A S.A.T. Screen is navigational equipment. When electronics get dunked under water they fizz out, black screen.

Black Beamed is slang for getting knocked out so hard you don't remember what the hell happened or where you are. It plays off the S.A.T. set-up, I'd think you'd know these two.

King of Queen has been out for YEARS, plus S.A.T. screens are in a ton of modern vehicles including being shoved into fancy sports cars. They are in Phones, Cars, Computers, Walky-Talkies, motorcycles, some fancy bicycles even.

:/
Seanny T

Canada

#11 Feb 25, 2013
I agree with shinis break down , Mvgt srd as well, all his bars were punch lines at least lol
Shini

Korea

#12 Feb 25, 2013
Some Random Dude wrote:
The 3rd bars was from King of Queens T.V. show.
A S.A.T. Screen is navigational equipment. When electronics get dunked under water they fizz out, black screen.
Black Beamed is slang for getting knocked out so hard you don't remember what the hell happened or where you are. It plays off the S.A.T. set-up, I'd think you'd know these two.
King of Queen has been out for YEARS, plus S.A.T. screens are in a ton of modern vehicles including being shoved into fancy sports cars. They are in Phones, Cars, Computers, Walky-Talkies, motorcycles, some fancy bicycles even.
:/
I thought you were calling him gay with the King of Queens reference (yes I know the show; that's the one with the guy who plays Phil Blart Mall Cop and he is a UPS guy) that one is still a lil awkward.

I never heard "black beamed" as slang but I'll give it too you. So I'll add an extra point to your score on the final bar. I've been "black beamed" before though. Not a good feeling. I always knew that as being Deboed. lol

Just provide the expos for that stuff. I didn't know that S.A.T. screens used for navigation devices. If you think the audience can't get it, please provide an expo.

If you provide an expo for a simple rhyme scheme or multi then the judges will do a 3AM. If it is something that might be slang and your unsure people will know it provide an expo. We have international audiences meaning you get people from Austrialia, Britian, South Africa, and America.

Congrats on the win. Just keep grinding. You're getting much better.

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