Chitown vs shini meta/pun tourney rou...

Chitown vs shini meta/pun tourney round 1

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“Get money ”

Since: Sep 11

Chicago

#1 Jul 23, 2013
Alright this is going to be good il wait for your check in shini. Good luck
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#2 Jul 24, 2013
check
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#3 Jul 24, 2013
He got "one over on me" our last time, out punched him with jabs, I still lost but shattered his glass spine

But tonight I'm out for revenge so open ya ass wide,
cause Shin's a gimp with a brass pipe, ya on ya "last life"

Only time ya spark the crome when ya on ya knees givin tards the dome
So if he 'bout that "gun play" he really talkin about them "hung mates"

In other words it's only write/right when he "takes shots"
Cuz we all see he like 50 or Officer Ricki just a "fake Pac"
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1. Bar 1 Root Metaphor with a personal. In our last bout everyone gave me the punchline category, but I still wound up losing the match.

2. Bar 2 Cognitive Metaphor I carried over the personal. A gimp is someone one who f!!!s and tortures their sex slaves. Basically I'm saying the beat down is going to be so bad that it will feel like I'm a gimp raping him.

3. Bar 3 Cognitive/ Mixed Metaphor- word association/personal. He mainly raps a lot of that gun play. Read between the lines.

4. Bar 4 Root Metaphor- 50 and Ricki both have taken shots and so had 2 Pac.

“Get money ”

Since: Sep 11

Chicago

#4 Jul 24, 2013
Lol good haha alright I'm at the bar but ima drop it now give me a sec

“Get money ”

Since: Sep 11

Chicago

#5 Jul 24, 2013
I'm sick....I been neglected
Take over this battle....walking dead infected

All ready dead how could shini be the cause of death
This dudes a bitch when im getting brains make sure she swallows till there's nothing left

Blood flows with rage virus
Eyes red bleeding out the eye lids drugged from this t-virus
Satellite I'm high kids

Total annihilation rip this dude to shreds thanks to my genetic modification limb by limb dismemberment I just love the sensation never gave him a chance
Attacked with no hesitation

Zombie meta the whole verse. Don't feel the need to break it down as it should be obvious but if ya like I will. Also I wanted to really create a metaphoric rap instead of punch line style and gun play which shini knows I love lol other then that just watched walking dead trailer for season four and it was on my mind so I was line a zombie ripping him apart hope y'all enjoy
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#6 Jul 24, 2013
chi-town lover wrote:
I'm sick....I been neglected
Take over this battle....walking dead infected
All ready dead how could shini be the cause of death
This dudes a bitch when im getting brains make sure she swallows till there's nothing left
Blood flows with rage virus
Eyes red bleeding out the eye lids drugged from this t-virus
Satellite I'm high kids
Total annihilation rip this dude to shreds thanks to my genetic modification limb by limb dismemberment I just love the sensation never gave him a chance
Attacked with no hesitation
Zombie meta the whole verse. Don't feel the need to break it down as it should be obvious but if ya like I will. Also I wanted to really create a metaphoric rap instead of punch line style and gun play which shini knows I love lol other then that just watched walking dead trailer for season four and it was on my mind so I was line a zombie ripping him apart hope y'all enjoy
I thought every bar was supposed to have a punch and a metaphor? But seriously, that was dope. Mine was more simple and gritty, but honestly even if you don't win that whole scheme has given me inspiration to revive the Video Game Tourney After this tourney's over. I think I will drop the actual link to the YouTube Videos to make them easier to do. When I read this I was totally in that Resident Evil/ Left for Dead Vibe.

“RRC (previous name).”

Since: Jun 13

Huntsville

#7 Jul 24, 2013
Shini wrote:
<quoted text>I thought every bar was supposed to have a punch and a metaphor? But seriously, that was dope. Mine was more simple and gritty, but honestly even if you don't win that whole scheme has given me inspiration to revive the Video Game Tourney After this tourney's over. I think I will drop the actual link to the YouTube Videos to make them easier to do. When I read this I was totally in that Resident Evil/ Left for Dead Vibe.
It wasn't that we couldn't find the video games it's just.. Like my game was a strategy game it was hard to right a diss to because of the fact that I had several countries and what not... More recent games with main characters would've been easier.... Or a mortal combat character pitted against another mortal combat character.
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#8 Jul 24, 2013
Niatroh wrote:
<quoted text>
It wasn't that we couldn't find the video games it's just.. Like my game was a strategy game it was hard to right a diss to because of the fact that I had several countries and what not... More recent games with main characters would've been easier.... Or a mortal combat character pitted against another mortal combat character.
I'll take that into consideration next time. Losing my step-dad made it hard for me to think of concepts that was working. Plus we had a bunch of people that weren't true gamers.

“Get money ”

Since: Sep 11

Chicago

#9 Jul 25, 2013
Shini wrote:
<quoted text>
I thought every bar was supposed to have a punch and a metaphor? But seriously, that was dope. Mine was more simple and gritty, but honestly even if you don't win that whole scheme has given me inspiration to revive the Video Game Tourney After this tourney's over. I think I will drop the actual link to the YouTube Videos to make them easier to do. When I read this I was totally in that Resident Evil/ Left for Dead Vibe.
Thanks yea I was in that zombie mode when I wrote it dont know if this is what srd was looking for but just wanted to write something different but you snapped with your verse I really dug it
Some Random Dude

United States

#10 Jul 25, 2013
Hell yeah, this is what I am after. Puns and metaphors each line and extremely visual and connected. Dude, this is exactly it. If you check mine out, I do a large number of pun meta mixes. Puns can be both subtle and complex, try to force it and you'll lose it.

I want to see the both of you try to mix them a little more subtle then through them in with your normals, your game will jump. That is the difference between December 2011-January 2012 on here. I started throughing mixed puns in and it got the run going.

I also have to work on other things, maybe getting a Pun/Meta/Simile/Punch/Imagery/ mulyties/storyline/AND nameplay. I shove a large number of techniques into my writing, it's up to the trained eye to find them.
Some Random Dude

United States

#11 Jul 25, 2013
Throwing mixed*

Sorry, I am a bit tired, helped by Grandpa. Loaded 960lbs of tree limbs into a truck, out in the sun after we did 1060lbs yesterday. Sure it took about 6 hours between the two, but it was the stacking wood from the limbs and his other firewood that got me.*yawns* I am tired man.

“No pain No Gain!”

Since: Mar 13

accra(Ghana)

#12 Jul 27, 2013
Metaphors:Chi-town lover
Puns:Shini
Who's mixed better?:Tie
Who's connected more?:Shini
Enjoyment:Chi town lover
Who got your vote:Chi town,this is my opinion caus shini style was like i have seen it already but its still great,but Chi-town brought something new to the plate.

“Get money ”

Since: Sep 11

Chicago

#13 Jul 27, 2013
-rapSwipe- wrote:
Metaphors:Chi-town lover
Puns:Shini
Who's mixed better?:Tie
Who's connected more?:Shini
Enjoyment:Chi town lover
Who got your vote:Chi town,this is my opinion caus shini style was like i have seen it already but its still great,but Chi-town brought something new to the plate.
Thanks glad you liked
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#14 Jul 27, 2013
Some Random Dude wrote:
Throwing mixed*
Sorry, I am a bit tired, helped by Grandpa. Loaded 960lbs of tree limbs into a truck, out in the sun after we did 1060lbs yesterday. Sure it took about 6 hours between the two, but it was the stacking wood from the limbs and his other firewood that got me.*yawns* I am tired man.
Take a load off.
Some Random Dude

United States

#15 Jul 27, 2013
Puns, like, "This is Nacho Cheese."
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#16 Jul 29, 2013
Are we doing a best of 3 here?

“Get money ”

Since: Sep 11

Chicago

#17 Jul 31, 2013
What's going on with this tourney?
Shini

Seongnam, Korea

#18 Aug 1, 2013
chi-town lover wrote:
What's going on with this tourney?
We have to vote on each other's threads. I will post a link again later.
2 dirty

Greensboro, NC

#19 Aug 1, 2013
I'm looking for help on my rhymes so any feed back is ok with me ill post something after this
2 dirty

Greensboro, NC

#20 Aug 1, 2013
I'm just starting out so cut me a break but here you go

I spit sick shit like Rosie odonalds nip slip
You blink you'll miss me
your gf kiss me
Text say she miss me
with you she pissy
Don't dis me I'm young and new like Miley Cyrus when she had a Disney show

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