SomeRandomDude

United States

#21 Dec 20, 2012
This I can live with, broken down bar for bar and explains everything I need to improve. So if I just cleared up the lines and made a more decisive punch I can hit him hard. Thanks HHH this helps ALLOT.
Shini

Korea

#22 Dec 22, 2012
Round 2

This Round is not about me, it's “about you”- there, there, here's a Kleenex don't pout Dude
You try to emcee, but you're words 'fall' empty, reality's 'crashing' cause it's the stout truth

Thinking I can't DO COMPLICATED will shred whatever rep you ever GOT COMPENSATED
When this bloody fag rhymes, it sounds like an acid trip meets bloody “rag time”

If Dude writes perfectly consecrated, why his flow always sounding constipated?
From all those bloody “crap lines” like his heart his rep's gonna BE A FLATLINE

You rap like a zealous Canibus Stan, the 'target's locked'“Some ran”, but in the ground is where I'm planting this Stan,
John Doe's Long Bow's “on point”? Nah “dumb dude” always missin the “MARK” so when I “DRAW” it is 'HITTIN HIS HEART'

So come random and throw tantrums, it's the same old song, this is the ho's anthem
It's a wrap with nothin but facts, the truth “slow noose chokes Dude” so now go phantom

Today, you're whinin to the judges becomes silent, everyone's tired of hearing this guy vent
So I'll put em in a box--“soundproof chamber”...Now did anyone HEAR where his cries went?
Shini

Korea

#23 Dec 22, 2012
Expo 1-6 They are all personals.

Expo Bar 1: Whatever SRD says becomes a mute point because he sometimes throws fits (set up)
Words fall empty/reality crashing= his punches don't connect/ everyone complains about this (punch)

Expo Bar 2-3: Bloody is the Queen's English version of the “f!@#ing” swear word. Bloody “rag time” is a double entendre. Rag time is a swing jazz music style. And bloody rags is a euphemism for a period. SRD complained last round that simple set-ups/ punches usually win.

Expo Bar 4-5- Canibus started is battle rap with “Tom Cruise Mom Shoes” soaked in some Wonton Soup” John Doe's Long Bow is a play off his name (Somerandomdude). In bar 5, I continue the theme with a personal.

Def. Consecrated- to be holy or perfect
Phantom- an invisible being,
to become invisible
SomeRandomDude

Post Falls, ID

#24 Dec 22, 2012
I need to be drunk to understand you naggin', you're the equivalent to Mike Tyson rappin'
It'll take more then a tug to unravel that tricks panties he's got a massive knot in!

Takin' the Paddy Wagon to Manhattan so I can finally stuff his 'log cabin'
You're lines are so misshapen, you make Adalia Rose look ready for a beauty pageant!

Quasimodo without a heart to match it, he's 'well down' on his luck and gaggin'!
The story behind the scenes of Disney's 'magic', when it's wood he's just fantastic!

A self imploding dumb@ss thinkin' braggin' about Sexual Actions is speaking in Vulgar Latin!
He couldn't go the distance draggin', with him fifty overloaded Conestoga Wagons!

I'm sorry to go on a tagent, but imagine he's so easy it's just a unbreakable habit!
The Camera Man just wackin' and jackin' this to this delusional Mattress Actress!

In other words he's shot like Missy gettin' only a fragment of the action standin' at attention!
Clappin' his d!ck in fashion, suckin' in his gut to appeal to me but 'it's too fat too get in!'
SomeRandomDude

Post Falls, ID

#25 Dec 22, 2012
when it comes to wood*
SomeRandomDude

Post Falls, ID

#26 Dec 22, 2012
I don't even want to put an expo... too lazy. I assume Shini won though since there are things I know people won't get.
SomeRandomDude

United States

#28 Dec 22, 2012
I didn't quit, I just feel like he won. It's a 2/3 but if wants to go another round I'll been over Attila the Hun.

“Horrocore-Tourna ment 2012CHAMP”

Since: May 11

Calgary, Canada

#29 Dec 25, 2012
overall: i think shini took round 2. lol SRD i did get most of ur references, pree clever and good. but i just found shini's had a nicer flow, and when i read em i just plain like it more. he also had some clever lines. shini is a beast right now haha i assume he will go for the world title again in january, as i will. ill probly hafta face him in order to go against HHH to get the title. im pree stoked for that too, SRD didnt join in but january i better see SRD in the mix for the world title lol.
SomeRandomDude

United States

#31 Dec 26, 2012
I think I did best on that one. :/
Shini

Korea

#32 Feb 7, 2013
Ten bars Let's go!

Let's keep track of his LACK OF SKILL, I don't have to out rap em' cause this “Hunter” already TRACKED THE KILL,
I got this three like NASH N STEEL and my “Face” have MASS APPEAL while Dude's tagged “A HEEL”

Sorry but your bitchin gets no pardon son, I'mma shake em on some PARKINSONS
Just commit to commitin MYRTYRDOM, this TRE'll TREVON MARTIN SOME

Since he like KOTD I'm about to make this a DIZASTER, blows buckle and BEND HER (Bender)
I am the REAL DEAL I rock this ORGANIK, final CHAPTER cause on the mic I am MANIK

It's obvious I am Bet-EURGH than you, ya just Po, call me Rich d!ck deep in a bitch
I already zipped em up and now I sending BITCH SIX FEET IN A DITCH

Scratch that, it's a GULLY TK-O on MY MIC, CAN-I-BUS try to get MY DUB on MY HYPE
Bitchin about card position-UNO LAVOS, in this art of dissin YOU DON”T GOT FLOWS

Ya angle's like TRICKY P, 90 DeGREE you STAY FRAIL that's why you leavin with A-L
Even with Arcane's ghost writer you could never get PAID WELL cause the way you BEHAVE FAILS

Purge this lack of talent cause he has a “hollow hand”(HOLLOHAN) feed em lines then make em BRUCE B REST IN PEACE, cause all we see is a shell cause he a HOLLOW MAN

Him bein TOP TEIR, nope NOT HERE he isn't as PASSIONATE no matter how you FASHION IT
So I brought along Illmac's Hanzo Blade to DISS PLAY/display his DNA on that CASHIS TIP

Keep trying to pester me that Hattori blade will cut my KRAFT leave ya CHEDDER CHEESE
Address me as SHREDDER CHIEF, I'll leave the scene like it's a shotty horrah PLEASURE PIECE.

3-0 this isn't a MYSTERY, no one here should be CONFOUNDED
Ya done DISSING ME, I'm ya “history” that's why DUMB's (random) FOUND DEAD/(Dumbfoundead)
Shini

Korea

#33 Feb 7, 2013
Expo Bar 1 Nash and Shaq (shaq played Steel, a defunt movie role)
Hunter- double entendre (HHH)/hunter
Face (good guy in wrestling)
Heel (bad guy in wrestling)

Expo Bar 2- Tre is a shot/ Parkinson's is a disease where your whole body shakes

Expo Bar 3-10 Battle Rapper's Emcee names. I wanted to make a nameplay diss using other rappers names.

Bar 6 A-L is 90 degrees

Bar 8- An omage to PoRich Him bein TOP TEIR, nope NOT HERE

Bar 8-9 Illmac vs. Bender (He has a Hattori hanzo blade scheme) I am paying omage to that too.
Seanny T

Edmonton, Canada

#34 Feb 7, 2013
Hollow hand/hollohan/hollow Man line was dooooope lol I was reading ur verse in my mind and went 'ooohhh' out loud haha
SomeRandomDude

Post Falls, ID

#35 Feb 8, 2013
I'm here, except my mind is somewhere else. So forgive me when I drop this.
SomeRandomDude

Post Falls, ID

#36 Feb 8, 2013
North Korean Dreams attack on America while you're waiting for the, "North to free you!"
This is no American Civil War you're an ignorant foreigner unable to see through the clear view

You're got on a red coat, sportin' it so it looks like you never bleed as us normal mortals do
So grab the brown Wesson Smith slacks before I use this Smith 'n' Wesson an' get forceful too

Let me ask you, "Why do you look under the weather?" I'm the Weather man weither you gather
The forecast needs to be weathered the header remains the weather over your head I'd rather

Piss on ya 'cause you'd believe it if I called it yellow rain I'm so hot my body's water evaperated
I ended your drought finally got wet the Weather man is still over your head you're immasculated

Now I ask you again, "Why do you look under the weather?" TEITHER your BALLS to the pole
Before they fall off again when I drop a Cherry Bomb right into your pants again Shin ya whole

Visionary sight is narrower then a Panagraph's view from inside a Pentigram with a Satanic view
Worshippin' the Devil and not believin' in GOD even though the Devil himself believes in this dude

Your whole crew is startin' to question ya too, haven't paid them in weeks an' their payment's due
The Devil gave you brains of a talented wrapper, not talent at all to be talented rapper guess who

It's Doctor Who "Floatin' Ya Boat" "It's All Gravy" Seamen seein' Semen's hept the boat afloat
Repeat that, "Seamen, seein' Semen's kept the boat afloat while they fillin' this sad bloke,"

Ya Shini we all know only Seamen(Semen) keeps your boat afloat sittin' here watchin' ya choke
Surrounded by warm bodies so you can't die in the cold 'cause this storm is 'bout to sink the boat

Drownin' in snow like Seamen, Semen an' Coke, GOD's a sense of humor 'cause this kid is a joke
Mr. Titanic I'm your Iceberg ya I'm that cold, came out of no where an' I just refused to let you float
Shini

Korea

#37 Feb 8, 2013
SomeRandomDude wrote:
North Korean Dreams attack on America while you're waiting for the, "North to free you!"
This is no American Civil War you're an ignorant foreigner unable to see through the clear view
You're got on a red coat, sportin' it so it looks like you never bleed as us normal mortals do
So grab the brown Wesson Smith slacks before I use this Smith 'n' Wesson an' get forceful too
Let me ask you, "Why do you look under the weather?" I'm the Weather man weither you gather
The forecast needs to be weathered the header remains the weather over your head I'd rather
Piss on ya 'cause you'd believe it if I called it yellow rain I'm so hot my body's water evaperated
I ended your drought finally got wet the Weather man is still over your head you're immasculated
Now I ask you again, "Why do you look under the weather?" TEITHER your BALLS to the pole
Before they fall off again when I drop a Cherry Bomb right into your pants again Shin ya whole
Visionary sight is narrower then a Panagraph's view from inside a Pentigram with a Satanic view
Worshippin' the Devil and not believin' in GOD even though the Devil himself believes in this dude
Your whole crew is startin' to question ya too, haven't paid them in weeks an' their payment's due
The Devil gave you brains of a talented wrapper, not talent at all to be talented rapper guess who
It's Doctor Who "Floatin' Ya Boat" "It's All Gravy" Seamen seein' Semen's hept the boat afloat
Repeat that, "Seamen, seein' Semen's kept the boat afloat while they fillin' this sad bloke,"
Ya Shini we all know only Seamen(Semen) keeps your boat afloat sittin' here watchin' ya choke
Surrounded by warm bodies so you can't die in the cold 'cause this storm is 'bout to sink the boat
Drownin' in snow like Seamen, Semen an' Coke, GOD's a sense of humor 'cause this kid is a joke
Mr. Titanic I'm your Iceberg ya I'm that cold, came out of no where an' I just refused to let you float
Nice flow Dude! I can double time this. Even if you don't get round three this is some of your best work yet. That opener hurt btw. lol Some of these punches were off due to the intricate flow you use, but if you can flow like that and have it set-up/punch you can become a problem for many people here.
Some Random Dude

United States

#38 Feb 8, 2013
It's nothing compared to my strength level. However, I feel like an @ss. Something personal and at affected it poorly. :(
chitown-lover

Chicago, IL

#39 Feb 10, 2013
Srd good flow some of your punches were like "what is his angle here?" I think you played out the weather man and seamen, seemen thing out to much one bar was good enough it just felt like you kept repeating the same line. Your word play was tight but just a bit over did. My fav. Line from you was

" I'm so hot my body's water evaporated " that's sick

Shini dope verse especially to a fan of kotd which I am. I liked the name play dis kinda tough to do and shows alot of skill. Also I liked the word play

hollow man, hollow hand, holohan

FAV. line "your bitchin gets no pardon son, Imma shake em on some Parkinson "

Multies- shini
Flow- shini
Name play- shini
Wordplay- srd
Concept- shini
Entertainment - I just enjoyed shini's verse more liked the kotd name diss flowed better had better overall structure. What I liked about it was that it was more general and people could easily understand his punches whereas srd yours was too deep, where only you might understand it unless I Google shit to see where your going with it.I felt like I missed the punch a couple times. Had to go back and read it like what is his angle here. Dont get me wrong it was good not some of your best by far I've seen better on the spit it forum from you actually the one you posted like last week or so. Thought had better rhyming and flow then this one.

Mvgt: shini just smoother flow better punches harder disses
chitown-lover

Chicago, IL

#40 Feb 10, 2013
Srd I thought your second round was better then this one imo
Some Random Dude

United States

#41 Feb 10, 2013
Ironically, those were simple lines. /facepalm Maybe I can't go all out where my strength is... *hangs head in disapointment*
Shini

Korea

#43 Feb 10, 2013
North Korean Dreams attack on America while you're waiting for the, "North to free you!"
This is no American Civil War you're an ignorant foreigner unable to see through the clear view <--- this was my favorite one because people can't seem to grasp that I am actually a foreigner there and just run with played out Asian jokes. Also I liked the double entendre because it seems like an Asian joke/conspriracy theorist angle is implied. You have the wittiness as expressed here. It is about getting general audiences to be able to awe at your witiness. With a line like this I think your well on your way. It took me a year of just writing to get the punches combined with the witiness down. Just ask Seanny T or Mulisha Made how bad I used to be.

You're got on a red coat, sportin' it so it looks like you never bleed as us normal mortals do
So grab the brown Wesson Smith slacks before I use this Smith 'n' Wesson an' get forceful too <--- Not a fan of gun bars, but this one expresses some witiness. When I wrote the Trevon Martin line, I was talking in a lyrical sence, but I wrote it so it would sound like a gun bar.

^^^ these were good imo.
This one will probably get slept on.
vvv
Visionary sight is narrower then a Panagraph's view from inside a Pentigram with a Satanic view
Worshippin' the Devil and not believin' in GOD even though the Devil himself believes in this dude

The seaman/semen and weather/whether schemes was nice to listen to, but punchwise it was a bit off. I liked the flow of that one and I liked your 3rd round the most. I've been trying take text battling to another level where themes are used to help complicate the verses. I don't see too many textcees do it.(just the skilled ones and even then its horrorcore) I think my round 2 and the verse I wrote against Phaze was better, but you have to admit there was a level of complexity here. Personally, I thought you would have enjoyed it since I don't usually do a lot of wordplay/nameplay and it was KOTD related and the fact I tied in personals.

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