SomeRandomDude Vs. Shini

SomeRandomDude Vs. Shini

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Shini

Korea

#1 Dec 15, 2012
I don't know why I am botherin to trash this dude
Maybe it's out of charity, yeah I'm that crude

It won't take 3 rounds to SET THE PACE
Think he gonna rebound, No! I gonna WET THE PLACE

Red when I go and SET THE STAGE
This a 'clean kill' ya need to inSPECT THE PLACE

This wanna be Spartacus with a retarded lisp
don't want no part of this, I'm here to discard a bitch

this is a bloody mess so just close the curtains
wait I'm sorry, that's just his period perkin

Like his style the body's gonna be everywhere
He ran dumb, beatin me gon take a heavy prayer
(Random)

Expo Bar 6: Word Play and triple entendre.
Shini

Korea

#2 Dec 15, 2012
VS. Somerandomdude

Rebound, ha, buddy I refuse to give a reach around
This guys screwed a fag misused and abused
Called me his Dad to go get off and beat a round
In the bedroom he took his tissues and issues
See He Is Nothing Impeccable* just a "Virgin Wh)re"**
Told him he'd be hung admitting it so he's deliberating***
Going second though he bled first "THIS IS WAR!"****
"There will be much blood shed" Achmed it's liberating*****
He's flowing, prefer insert or pad? It is happy hour
and I'm on a bloody rampage over his self-made caviar******
Sh!t, that was 5 bars I need one more
Pack his fudge so he moves an' is completely done for*******
Shini

Korea

#3 Dec 15, 2012
SomerandomDude's Expo:

*S.H.I.N.I.: See He Is Nothing Impeccable

**Some females think if they take it up the arse they are still a virgin.

***In Korea you might still, but you'd be hung for admitting you are gay. It also means to be hung if you have large genitalia.

****Married men I talked to said it feels like war with their Wives every three weeks. I also tried to emphasize this Jeff Dunham's joke with Achmed the Dead Terrorist.

*****It's liberating to, "Flow." When you rap you flow, but it also is Period referenced as well.

******Women have there periods and they are ejecting dead eggs so they may make more.

*******There was a joke.
Who would get to California first, two Lesbians or two Gays?

The Lesbians 'cause the Gays are still packing their fudge.

Summary, I called him a completely fertil Hermaphrodite.
Shini

Korea

#4 Dec 15, 2012
Expo Bar 2: He asked for three rounds. We battled and I won before so this would be a rebound, he also lost a previous battle which I was judge.

Expo Bar 5: A reference to his behavior with Chi-town. He was not accepting the loss to him.

Expo Bar 6: Wordplay with a triple entandre.
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#5 Dec 17, 2012
Please vote here.
SomeRandomDude

United States

#6 Dec 18, 2012
Who knew that for the two of us, it would be so difficult to get a vote?

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Since: Sep 11

Chicago

#7 Dec 18, 2012
I'll vote but not sure which one is srd rap everything says shini wrote
Shini

Korea

#8 Dec 18, 2012
chi-town lover wrote:
I'll vote but not sure which one is srd rap everything says shini wrote
The first one is mine and the second one is SRD's.

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Since: Sep 11

Chicago

#9 Dec 19, 2012
Mvgt: shini thought his flow was much better. Better structure, rhyme scheme, flow, overall word play, and easier to read and understand. Srd I seen what your trying to do with your rhymes and wordplay but it just didn't connect smoothly. I put on an instrumental and felt that the rhymes didn't come off to good. Shini on the other hand flowed better to different types of beats. Plus slicker punches. Favorite punch was

"this is a bloody mess so just close the curtains wait I'm sorry, that's just his period perkin"

I like mainly that its a direct hit. Anyone can read it and easily understand it. Good battle you two. Srd you still got a couple more rounds to come back
SomeRandomDude

United States

#10 Dec 20, 2012
I still see simple is called better... I don't think I'll EVER win a battle because of this. I have made DIRECT HITS this is also ON TOPIC DISSES. I followed everything you guys asked me, made direct punches and kept to the for hit. Yet all I see from Chi is the same response I've always gotten.
SomeRandomDude

United States

#11 Dec 20, 2012
To the first hit*

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Yo Mom's Mouth

#12 Dec 20, 2012
ayo I voted on this battle yesterday and it took me 25 minutes to give you a good breakdown...aaaahhhhh..
SomeRandomDude

United States

#13 Dec 20, 2012
:/

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Yo Mom's Mouth

#14 Dec 20, 2012
Shini's verse

I don't know why I am botherin to trash this dude
Maybe it's out of charity, yeah I'm that crude
^^
this is a throwaway bar imo.. no punch that i can see..no multi and
the set up seems stronger the Hit bar 1/5

It won't take 3 rounds to SET THE PACE
Think he gonna rebound, No! I gonna WET THE PLACE
^^
multi , better still a lil self hype on it tho..a flo concept
connected to "Wet the Place" wouldve strengthened the punch 2.5/5

Red when I go and SET THE STAGE
This a 'clean kill' ya need to inSPECT THE PLACE
^^^
this was better I liked the multi and punched linked pretty well
directed well also...4/5

This wanna be Spartacus with a retarded lisp
don't want no part of this, I'm here to discard a bitch
^^^
Multi, str8 diss, no pun tho... a pun wouldve put this line
to a five ..luckily the personal helped 3/5

this is a bloody mess so just close the curtains
wait I'm sorry, that's just his period perkin
^^^
Cool diss line the personal pushed it up, pun was aight..Multi's
helped up this line a bit imo... 4/5

Like his style the body's gonna be everywhere
He ran dumb, beatin me gon take a heavy prayer
(Random)
^^
Nameplay, diss using his name , it couldve stung more by using the
nameplay as the closing word somehow or referencing a keyword
in his but still a dope line 4/5

18.5/30 good decent verse

SRD's verse

Rebound, ha, buddy I refuse to give a reach around
This guys screwed a fag misused and abused
^^^
okay setup bar is stronger than the Hit bar, decnt diss multi's
arent lining up but decent as a str8 diss..2/5

Called me his Dad to go get off and beat a round
In the bedroom he took his tissues and issues
^^^
a continuance of the previous concept okay rhyme
scheme was a lil hard to pinpoint..I get it Multis are aight
now..set up is a wittier diss than the Hit line.. 2.5/5

See He Is Nothing Impeccable* just a "Virgin Wh)re"**
Told him he'd be hung admitting it so he's deliberating***
^^^
Im not as into Acronyms so much as easy wordplay but I'll
give you that, but this line is a miss without the expos, and even
with the expos leaves a bit to be desired..imo 2.5/5

Going second though he bled first "THIS IS WAR!"****
"There will be much blood shed" Achmed it's liberating*****
^^^
Not much on this imo, I felt the vocabulary was excellent tho.just
needed better imagery or a more direct punchline..still without an
expo this bar loses alot of points 2.5/5

He's flowing, prefer insert or pad? It is happy hour
and I'm on a bloody rampage over his self-made caviar******
^^^
I liked the rhyme vowels you used here , I liked the setup a lil
more than the Hit line..the concepts decnt .. 3/5

Sh!t, that was 5 bars I need one more
Pack his fudge so he moves an' is completely done for*******
^^^
This was a giveaway imo.. beside the lil pun'shit=pack fudge'
this had no sting and the joke itself was a lil bland imo..
1/5

13/30 not too bad..

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Since: Nov 08

Yo Mom's Mouth

#15 Dec 20, 2012
No hate but I wanted to break it down well to get you a good idea
of what I mean.. everybody votes different so this is just imo..

breakdown by Cats..
Flow.. Tie Shini's was aight but qwik on some lines and slow on others
while SRD gets points for having an intricate flo..
Multi's..Shini
Punches..Shini Some of SRD's concepts were a lil too busy..
nameplay/wordplay..SRD took more attempts on this so he hit more.
enjoyment...Shini was just easier to read and grasp..worded a lil
better imo..
contin...

MVGT Shini just had a better Battle verse , SRD has the vocab to
compete with Shini but is trying to overcomplicate his concepts,
too much...

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Since: Nov 08

Yo Mom's Mouth

#16 Dec 20, 2012
haha it keeps erasing my vote..lucky i did it on my notepad this time..haha

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Since: Nov 08

Yo Mom's Mouth

#17 Dec 20, 2012
Shini's verse

I don't know why I am botherin to trash this dude
Maybe it's out of charity, yeah I'm that crude
^^
this is a throwaway bar imo.. no punch that i can see..no multi and
the set up seems stronger the Hit bar 1/5

It won't take 3 rounds to SET THE PACE
Think he gonna rebound, No! I gonna WET THE PLACE
^^
multi , better still a lil self hype on it tho..a flo concept
connected to "Wet the Place" wouldve strengthened the punch 2.5/5

Red when I go and SET THE STAGE
This a 'clean kill' ya need to inSPECT THE PLACE
^^^
this was better I liked the multi and punched linked pretty well
directed well also...4/5

This wanna be Spartacus with a retarded lisp
don't want no part of this, I'm here to discard a bitch
^^^
Multi, str8 diss, no pun tho... a pun wouldve put this line
to a five ..luckily the personal helped 3/5

this is a bloody mess so just close the curtains
wait I'm sorry, that's just his period perkin
^^^
Cool diss line the personal pushed it up, pun was aight..Multi's
helped up this line a bit imo... 4/5

Like his style the body's gonna be everywhere
He ran dumb, beatin me gon take a heavy prayer
(Random)
^^
Nameplay, diss using his name , it couldve stung more by using the
nameplay as the closing word somehow or referencing a keyword
in his but still a dope line 4/5

18.5/30 good decent verse

“facebook.com/tre .tru”

Since: Nov 08

Yo Mom's Mouth

#18 Dec 20, 2012
SRD's verse

Rebound, ha, buddy I refuse to give a reach around
This guys screwed a fag misused and abused
^^^
okay setup bar is stronger than the Hit bar, decnt diss multi's
arent lining up but decent as a str8 diss..2/5

Called me his Dad to go get off and beat a round
In the bedroom he took his tissues and issues
^^^
a continuance of the previous concept okay rhyme
scheme was a lil hard to pinpoint..I get it Multis are aight
now..set up is a wittier diss than the Hit line.. 2.5/5

See He Is Nothing Impeccable* just a "Virgin Wh)re"**
Told him he'd be hung admitting it so he's deliberating***
^^^
Im not as into Acronyms so much as easy wordplay but I'll
give you that, but this line is a miss without the expos, and even
with the expos leaves a bit to be desired..imo 2.5/5

Going second though he bled first "THIS IS WAR!"****
"There will be much blood shed" Achmed it's liberating*****
^^^
Not much on this imo, I felt the vocabulary was excellent tho.just
needed better imagery or a more direct punchline..still without an
expo this bar loses alot of points 2.5/5

He's flowing, prefer insert or pad? It is happy hour
and I'm on a bloody rampage over his self-made caviar******
^^^
I liked the rhyme vowels you used here , I liked the setup a lil
more than the Hit line..the concepts decnt .. 3/5

Sh!t, that was 5 bars I need one more
Pack his fudge so he moves an' is completely done for*******
^^^
This was a giveaway imo.. beside the lil pun'shit=pack fudge'
this had no sting and the joke itself was a lil bland imo..
1/5

13/30 not too bad..

“facebook.com/tre .tru”

Since: Nov 08

Yo Mom's Mouth

#19 Dec 20, 2012
No hate but I wanted to break it down well to get you a good idea
of what I mean.. everybody votes different so this is just imo..

breakdown by Cats..
Flow.. Tie Shini's was aight but qwik on some lines and slow on others
while SRD gets points for having an intricate flo..
Multi's..Shini
Punches..Shini Some of SRD's concepts were a lil too busy..
nameplay/wordplay..SRD took more attempts on this so he hit more.
enjoyment...Shini was just easier to read and grasp..worded a lil
better imo..

MVGT Shini just had a better Battle verse , SRD has the vocab to
compete with Shini but is trying to overcomplicate his concepts,
too much...

and dont cry about my vote I broke it down so theres no need to wonder about it..
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#20 Dec 20, 2012
Thanks for the breakdown guys. I wanted a weak first bar so I could build up momentum. Also I was working with a theatre arena concept. Sometimes I had to sacrifice a punch here or there to keep it in the concept or keep the flow going.

I also used a pick up word to connect 2 different bars together. I'm gonna turn it up in round 2. Best of luck to you SRD.

@ HHH Expo bar 1 He just asked me to battle. I even though he asked me, I would have gladly beat the snot out of him. It was just a little self-glorification. Nothing too complex.

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