Epitaph vs YoYoYo

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#1
Jul 8, 2013
 
10-16 Barz
First to 5 votes

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#2
Jul 8, 2013
 
SRD and BOSCO votes dickriding votes don't count
Some Random Dude

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#4
Jul 8, 2013
 
I only vote unbiased, I will won't be biased. I don't particularly like Yoyoyo. I never really liked his style period. I only write down my vote based on, Punches, Flow, Multies, Metas, and last but not least nameplay.

Personally, Yoyoyo took it by a hair. Calling me a d!ckriding biased voter is attacking my word and being that's all I have as a man. I don't have wealth or weight. You are attacking the one thing I have, THAT is why I am battling you.
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#5
Jul 8, 2013
 
Too soft, bet I bone your broad in your new home
Epitaph means your text is only hard on a tombstone
Me and your girl ‘swing an ep’, cause you a bum bitter spitter
She thinks we a ‘two piece’ she’s just a one hitter quitter
I’m the numb frigid liquor, that makes her breast perk
After that, she’ll ‘shut down E’ like a major network
Pardon the past six bars tha were all about your chick
Just showing when I diss you I’ll still be talking bout a b1tch
Bias votes? With your skill I ten times it and you felt
Kill you before your prime like Len Bias with the Celtics
You’re ‘funny but cheesy’, call the ‘clown cheddar’
You’re a ball with no air, I’m just ‘all around/ a round better’
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#6
Jul 8, 2013
 
"Epitaph means your text is only hard on a tombstone

After that, she’ll ‘shut down E’ like a major network

Kill you before your prime like Len Bias with the Celtics"

Nice man, much respect for those lines.
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Jul 8, 2013
 
Some Random Dude wrote:
"Epitaph means your text is only hard on a tombstone
After that, she’ll ‘shut down E’ like a major network
Kill you before your prime like Len Bias with the Celtics"
Nice man, much respect for those lines.
respect. much appreciated

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#8
Jul 8, 2013
 
I'm spittin this verbal rapture, Gabriel has blown the trumpet
gnashin at his pelvis, awaitin the contents of his explodin stomach
Bitch a storm is comin, you have no planned evacuation
why are you bout my bitch, I'll make you swallow your dick after castration
I don't have the patience, I have attention deficit
I will split open your cerebrum and attempt to insert a blade of intelligence
this is made of manevolence, I will go on existing
as you go to dig in the backyard, on the search, after the bulletin report, your mom is missing

“RRC (previous name).”

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#9
Jul 8, 2013
 
yoyoyo wrote:
Too soft, bet I bone your broad in your new home
Epitaph means your text is only hard on a tombstone
Me and your girl ‘swing an ep’, cause you a bum bitter spitter
She thinks we a ‘two piece’ she’s just a one hitter quitter
IÂ’m the numb frigid liquor, that makes her breast perk
After that, she’ll ‘shut down E’ like a major network
Pardon the past six bars tha were all about your chick
Just showing when I diss you IÂ’ll still be talking bout a b1tch
Bias votes? With your skill I ten times it and you felt
Kill you before your prime like Len Bias with the Celtics
You’re ‘funny but cheesy’, call the ‘clown cheddar’
You’re a ball with no air, I’m just ‘all around/ a round better’
Wow sick rap started really strong, but kinda died for me at the end.

“RRC (previous name).”

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#10
Jul 8, 2013
 
Epitaph wrote:
I'm spittin this verbal rapture, Gabriel has blown the trumpet
gnashin at his pelvis, awaitin the contents of his explodin stomach
Bitch a storm is comin, you have no planned evacuation
why are you bout my bitch, I'll make you swallow your dick after castration
I don't have the patience, I have attention deficit
I will split open your cerebrum and attempt to insert a blade of intelligence
this is made of manevolence, I will go on existing
as you go to dig in the backyard, on the search, after the bulletin report, your mom is missing
Came in fairly strong, but your not putting in powerful punches like yoyoyo is... The tombstone line was a nasty punchline and nameplay. So you need to be more harder on dissing him... Not what you'll do to him.

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#11
Jul 8, 2013
 
thank you Niatroh , that's what I needed to know what I was doing wrong, less of the threats, and focus on the punches, gotcha
Shini

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#12
Jul 10, 2013
 
I'll break this down when I have some free time.

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Since: Nov 08

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#13
Jul 12, 2013
 
No Bias No hate..
Yoyoyo
well it just looks like yoyo has a better punchline style..
looks like he took more time than he did on the disses in the freestyle forum..
agreed on with SRD and Niatroh
the first four bars hit cleanly no stuttering til after the B!tch line.. tbh that was nice @yoyo

Epitaph..
I see where your going with this and I can tell your trying your in transition right now.. tbh I didnt think your original style was THAT bad, but if your trying to continue the punchline thing heres all I think you need to do to level up quick..I see some of your setup lines have a bit of sting but the punch falls flat.. try thinking of your punch-line line first..then piece the setup together.. it will take waaay longer, but until you get better at recognizing the concepts your wordplay or play on words gives you..that would be the easiest way to make sure your punch and setup lines pan out well.. hope that technique works for you ..

anyway my vote has to go to YOYOYO.. props

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#14
Jul 12, 2013
 
Thanks man, this battle was before I got the bigger picture so kinda know I lost this one, but yeah I feel you, and I'm taking heed to all advice given from now on, this battle was during my " ego phase " lol, I'm better now, thanks to all of you vets :)

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#15
Jul 12, 2013
 
I want my rematch against yoyo but I figure u done scare him off now lmao

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#16
Jul 12, 2013
 
No worries bruh .. Ur elevating fast....
Shini

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#17
Jul 12, 2013
 
yoyoyo wrote:
Too soft, bet I bone your broad in your new home
Epitaph means your text is only hard on a tombstone
Me and your girl ‘swing an ep’, cause you a bum bitter spitter
She thinks we a ‘two piece’ she’s just a one hitter quitter
I’m the numb frigid liquor, that makes her breast perk
After that, she’ll ‘shut down E’ like a major network
Pardon the past six bars tha were all about your chick
Just showing when I diss you I’ll still be talking bout a b1tch
Bias votes? With your skill I ten times it and you felt
Kill you before your prime like Len Bias with the Celtics
You’re ‘funny but cheesy’, call the ‘clown cheddar’
You’re a ball with no air, I’m just ‘all around/ a round better’
Pardon the past six lines*** tha were all about your chick
Just showing when I diss you I’ll still be talking bout a b1tch

A bar is 1.5-2.5 lines

But nice material.
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#18
Jul 12, 2013
 
Flow: Yoyoyo
Punch: Yoyoyo
Scheme: Epitaph
Multis Yoyoyo
Creativity: Epitaph
Wordplay/Nameplay: Yoyoyo (Shut down E)
Enjoyment: Yoyoyo

While I did enjoy reading both textcees. Yoyoyo clearly had the more polished piece of material.

Remember a bar is 2 lines of material; not one.

I usually favor for creativity, but this case I'll make an exception because there were some Epitaph punchlines that had really good set-ups and then disappointing punches. He has a nice vocabulary and doesn't rely purely on multing which can be respected, but he can multi well when he wants to.

Yoyo came swinging from the ballpark with better flow and punches. Flow is important because people need to understand when the material starts and stops and where the punchlines connect.

My favorite Epitaph bar:

B!tch a storm is comin, you have no planned evacuation
why are you bout my b!tch, I'll make you swallow your d!ck after castration

My Favorite yoyoyo Bar:

Pardon the past six bars tha were all about your chick
Just showing when I diss you I’ll still be talking bout a b1tch

Those were good bars. I would have arranged yoyo's material another way and put the talking about a bitch line as a closer. That would have been an awesome closer and it would have been 6 bars then.
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#19
Jul 13, 2013
 
If I used both, I would have used them for a REALLY heavy closer.
Personally though, the pines I pointed out were creative.

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