freestyle battle, spit it! (raps only)
yoyoyo

United States

#34216 Jul 13, 2013
The Black Frank White wrote:
yoyoyo -_-
That sh!t was NOT tight.
You talk bout @ss, and the last, you had was a guys,
You flow like cut onions, sh!t hurts my eyes.
You the cheap type,
you'd come with a water cup and fries,
and call that supersize,
I'd be surprised if you'd ever fly
you spit wack, I push your wig back
I get water and fries but your girl can get the big mac
You crybaby, beefs for lunch I'm serving you crew
Only tear I have is tatted that's from murdering you
My gun might blam, leave you done like "Damn!"
Make you leave soon as you came like one night stand

Since: May 13

Florence, SC

#34217 Jul 13, 2013
since u back how bout a 10 bar rematch yoyo
yoyoyo

United States

#34218 Jul 13, 2013
Epitaph wrote:
since u back how bout a 10 bar rematch yoyo
yeah for sure
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#34220 Jul 14, 2013
It's been a while since Nitroh got the "Tough Love Punchline Champion Belt."

Are there any challengers? I need a pool of names. I'll pick people based on if they recently had a punchline champion title shot or not.

Since Chi Town was the former champion he has to wait. Chi Town also has the World Region Champion belt.(Ask Seanny T if you want to challenge him for that one.)
Anonymous

Washington, UK

#34221 Jul 14, 2013
Some Random Dude wrote:
@Lucid
1. What can I do to improve on my flow?
I'd recommend learning basic music theory. Also, learn what syllables are and how to count them. It's syllables that make rythme.
2. How can I find better words, metaphors and similies, punches, etc?
I'd advise looking into what each are defined as and how they are created. Vocabulary comes with reading, lots and lots of reading.
3. How would I be able to estimate the exact bar count?
Estimate, you should run into it with two options. You know the count ahead of time or you don't. Structure, structure, structure.
4. How can I transform into a better lyricist and storyteller?
Listen to other rappers and read, read, read.
I also asked Shini this, only because our styles are so similar to me. However, either he thinks I won't progress under him or he isn't into taking me in. Either or I am okay with.
thanks man. I will keep all of this data stored in my mental, as I am taking it a lot more serious now than I ever have in the past.
Anonymous

Washington, UK

#34222 Jul 14, 2013
Hip Hop Hero wrote:
<quoted text>
umm cool rhymescheme..but ...
get a real profile name or I wont answer you again.. [email protected] ZERO!!haha
it only took 8 lines for ya azz to fail..
U need hard bars to feel like 'Ur back in jail.'(getting reamed)
So watch me Lockdown this phag-ets doubt's.
he knows he's gettin Fawked back to front... Azz to Mouth.
wants me to cume with my reply qwik 'blast'em out'
Bag ya body in 'Trailer trash' like Im at ya house.
that zero really needs better gifts, shop at target
fawkin with this vet.. dawg!! ya bound to get ya Balls snipped..
this is tight my dude. in my eyes I see this is something I can go by for my actual "debut" to have my name stamped in the game.

I like how it is really clever but only made from 8 single bars. Not too short, not too long which makes it awesome.

Since: May 13

Florence, SC

#34223 Jul 14, 2013
anybody on today, sorry yoyo, I went out last night, but I'm definately on for it today anytime, I will post it if u still down
The Black Frank White

Ridgedale, MO

#34224 Jul 14, 2013
yoyoyo wrote:
<quoted text>you spit wack, I push your wig back
I get water and fries but your girl can get the big mac
You crybaby, beefs for lunch I'm serving you crew
Only tear I have is tatted that's from murdering you
My gun might blam, leave you done like "Damn!"
Make you leave soon as you came like one night stand
you sing soft, Im hearing them gay sounds,
youd rather not stay found, Im beggin to slay clowns,
Spray rounds, leave your ass face down on the play ground,
Don't make me still you , tech polished to kill you,
Whole squad abolished , lemme windmill and fill you,
With strays floating from ak's, make you sit sideways,
My whole crew in jail mouths shut unfazed and ungrazed,
Yo crew has problems thats plain to see,
My crew was trained to counteract what your crew came to be,
Whe OG's had problems they came to me frantically,
My crew is trained time kill, yo crew's in training wheels,
Your crew will get maimed and brained at will,
My crew pops that painless pill,
Yo crew gets popped with that aimless drill and we sit and watch their brains get grilled.
Yo I'm bout to bomb ya, call the dhali lama, gotta a vid if osama give shit to pres Obama,
You don't wannaaaa,
Get mixed when I come off the hip,
You get ripped at both angles and left to dangle like Django
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#34228 Jul 14, 2013
Luc-ID wrote:
<quoted text>
this is tight my dude. in my eyes I see this is something I can go by for my actual "debut" to have my name stamped in the game.
I like how it is really clever but only made from 8 single bars. Not too short, not too long which makes it awesome.
That is 4 bars. 8 bars is generally 16 lines.
Anonymous

Gateshead, UK

#34230 Jul 15, 2013
Shini wrote:
<quoted text>
That is 4 bars. 8 bars is generally 16 lines.
yeah, you gotta point there bro.
CJ Bruvvy

Belfast, UK

#34231 Jul 15, 2013
Cj Bruvvy is here, and he's ready to clean house
I've got 9 lives but you're the pussy being chased by the mouse
Yeah I'm an underdog in every battle - not many rappers are white
I don't diss any ethnicity but in this I'm the heavy-white
If your black, if your a chink, I still respect y'all
But if y'all rap like that I'm gonna have to dissect y'all
Coz I'm big and I'm famous, my rhyming lines could go on for miles
And I run with the flow, you could call ms River Nile!

this is nof my best work, just a starter for this thread..

“No pain No Gain!”

Since: Mar 13

accra(Ghana)

#34232 Jul 15, 2013
@CJ have you been here before?caus ive read a similar rap or rap structure,and it aint good as a senior but a junior,u are on the right part.

Since: May 13

Florence, SC

#34233 Jul 15, 2013
Topix actually has a pulse.....

Since: May 13

Florence, SC

#34234 Jul 15, 2013
please father forgive me,
for from this holy grail, I chose to sip
since society shall uphold the sick
to my temple, i hold a loaded clip
as my soul composes corroded scripts
jottin the words of a poet's lips
erasin the sun with no eclipse
winkin at death as she blows a kiss
fuck love, to whom I don't know exist
East coast killa

Middleburg, FL

#34235 Jul 16, 2013
yo im on bike on the bridge thought i might take a hike ran into this man mad mike thought he was a dyke asked me for my # then i yelled sike then he caught me at the table drinking tomato juice wisperd in my hear he can make my butt hole loose told him talk to me again ill go kkk hang him from a nuse now this rap is coming to a end dont try to defend its over tryin to beat me is like findin a 4 leaf clover !What

Since: May 13

Florence, SC

#34236 Jul 16, 2013
East coast killa wrote:
yo im on bike on the bridge thought i might take a hike ran into this man mad mike thought he was a dyke asked me for my # then i yelled sike then he caught me at the table drinking tomato juice wisperd in my hear he can make my butt hole loose told him talk to me again ill go kkk hang him from a nuse now this rap is coming to a end dont try to defend its over tryin to beat me is like findin a 4 leaf clover !What
ROTFL @ picturing him thrusting his arms out going " !What " @ this piece of shit

Since: Sep 12

Dongola, IL

#34237 Jul 16, 2013
East coast killa wrote:
yo im on bike on the bridge thought i might take a hike ran into this man mad mike thought he was a dyke asked me for my # then i yelled sike then he caught me at the table drinking tomato juice wisperd in my hear he can make my butt hole loose told him talk to me again ill go kkk hang him from a nuse now this rap is coming to a end dont try to defend its over tryin to beat me is like findin a 4 leaf clover !What
Mostly basic rhymes... Need to make it abit more complex..

“Divide and conquer ”

Since: Mar 13

Brooklyn, New York

#34238 Jul 16, 2013
East coast killa wrote:
yo im on bike on the bridge thought i might take a hike ran into this man mad mike thought he was a dyke asked me for my # then i yelled sike then he caught me at the table drinking tomato juice wisperd in my hear he can make my butt hole loose told him talk to me again ill go kkk hang him from a nuse now this rap is coming to a end dont try to defend its over tryin to beat me is like findin a 4 leaf clover !What
East coast killa, more like the least known killa.
hes known to be patting heads and run like duck duck goose.
Watch him fuvk up soon, his dead corpse, filthy bars on my table and my lunch comes too.
You're nursery rhymes putting me to speep, but its set to snooze.
Man forget this fool, one simple beef and he'll regret his move.
I'm so "sharp" once I "come down", I'm known to execute..

“Divide and conquer ”

Since: Mar 13

Brooklyn, New York

#34239 Jul 16, 2013
Sleep* lol
big G

United States

#34242 Jul 16, 2013
True

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