Since: Dec 12

Staten Island, NY

#30122 Feb 1, 2013
To Mulisha rate me lol

Since: Aug 12

Location hidden

#30123 Feb 1, 2013
never improving his movement/never getting better//
somebody change that baby's Pampers then he'll be fresher/
I dont need to pressure in ledger's/ how to up ya rhymin/
if you survive it/even lumps of coal turn into Diamonds/
you wanna shine the brightest/ speak with verbage enlightened/
dont get Sour like vinegar it leaves U Pooh-C's tightened/
they sayin they dont like it/and some will call me evil?/
cause I dont like feeble free flo's from little emo's/
you trying to be deep.. getting cheers from ya peers/
I'll 'wave' goodbye, cuz my flow drowned this q)ueer in his tears/
I know I sound crazy/ try not to hate me/ little lady/
ill kick ya pelvis in B!tch , and leave ya middle gaping/
mulisha slayed him/and Im glad you changed ya avatar//
cuz peeps that peep it might tweak when they see your battle scars/
this dudes riding my D!ck like it had handle bars/
Im still not trying but left you crying with sample bars/
Godess

Courtice, Canada

#30124 Feb 1, 2013
Bum so big people say I make an earthquake
No I ain't fat it's just that my assfake
I just wanna say than I'm an alpha prey
So if you smart trust me just back away
See I'm a badasss I don't show up on Father's Day :D
Yes I act cute but beware I know how to shoot
Now stfu before I have to chuck my boot D:
See I love everyone give u the green card
But let's not disgaurd that flames flow sounds like he a retard
Forget sunscreen u lil preteen
Are u already forgetting I'm the queen
See mr flames stop with them blames
Your rap sounds gay u should be ashamed

Yea my name is Nicole
And I've been rapping for about 5 months now
I'm 14
And yea
Anonymous

UK

#30125 Feb 1, 2013
Mulisha made wrote:
<quoted text>
Really? if your serious I'll help you once even tho all you ever said to me before this moment was embedded in your diss..
tbh if your just making feel good songs about life and what not you're fine..
if your trying to be lyrical theres a bit of work to do..
Multies=7
flo=8.5
storytelling=9
structure=6
sims=7
metas=6
puns(dbl ent.)=0
complex=7
overall=?
I cant give you an overall, and this is based on the last 2 verses you dropped against me, Im not judging it as a Diss or there'd be more categories..
ya multies are cool but short, but this helps your flo stay fresh and change up like you do....as compared to what I do.
structure for writtens helps the reader catch your flo..
similes comparisons containing like or as not bad some of the concepts need to be more vivid tho.(not as vague)
metaphors you gotta work on those it just about wording, thus taking a secind to proofread will help you add depth to your concepts.
you dont have to do puns, but its considered advanced in this day and age, not mandatory for every rapper but being able to do it just gives you an edge ..for battling however, it is mandatory.
complexity are you literally just telling a story with simple verbage or do you use alternate words or bring a cool images with the big picture eg imagery.
hopefully this helps out.. Try Using google if your need to know what a double entendre is..
Thanks a lot "bro". Do you think I could ever get 9's or 10's on all the catagories when I get used to it?

Would you give me some tips and examples on what I would need to go do to be able to spit with a better "flow", better "multies", better "storytelling", more of a better "structure" so my "peers" can easily find my "flow", better similies, better "metaphors", become more "complex" verses?

Also can you tell me the most simple ways of how I can formulate some killing "punchlines"?

That is something I find really difficult for some reason.

Please help "bro".

“Horrocore-Tourna ment 2012CHAMP”

Since: May 11

Calgary, Canada

#30126 Feb 1, 2013
ppl we need votes on the world tourney battles! vote up!
Godess

Courtice, Canada

#30127 Feb 1, 2013
This the only place I can swear without my momma saying
Nicole f-k u to young u going back to day care
Then ima be like Mom's I'm in high school
Really moma u f-Kin fool
Then u gonna ground me and make new home rules
She gonna take my phone
She may even break my bones
Next day I'm gonna be unknown

Since: Jan 13

Location hidden

#30128 Feb 1, 2013
Mulisha made wrote:
<quoted text>
okay i hear you freestyle is a part of hip hop and of course i can freestyle, but if thats all anybody ecver did there wouldnt be much intelligence in our genre.. Who's your favorite artist? whats your favorite Hip Hop song? it's probably not freestyle..freestyle is great but to be considered an "Advanced Lyricist" you need to have ADVANCED LYRICS . then above it all you write lil subliminal disses towards people on here. even when they TRY and give you advice?.. thats why I keep knockin you around, idgaf who U are and at 13 with a skill set like yours you should be alot more humble and avtually try considering more advanced lyricists if you hope to become one.. If not fine, cool. But you are not allowed to redefine what a Lyricist is..let your words be the weapon for battle, not your excuse of why it was so SIMPLE...look at where you are a rap forum, the words you scribe here will remain for anyone to read, for the duration of the life of this site and the internet.. would you prefer to have them read a bunch of simple regurgitated lines as the outlook they have of you?..smh.. bro if you wanna do you go ahead do you.. but the minute 1 of you punks speaks my name expect retaliation from an advanced lyricist..
I know I'm saying I'm just trying to work on freestyle at the moment

Since: Aug 12

Location hidden

#30129 Feb 1, 2013
Godess wrote:
Bum so big people say I make an earthquake
No I ain't fat it's just that my assfake
I just wanna say than I'm an alpha prey
So if you smart trust me just back away
See I'm a badasss I don't show up on Father's Day :D
Yes I act cute but beware I know how to shoot
Now stfu before I have to chuck my boot D:
See I love everyone give u the green card
But let's not disgaurd that flames flow sounds like he a retard
Forget sunscreen u lil preteen
Are u already forgetting I'm the queen
See mr flames stop with them blames
Your rap sounds gay u should be ashamed
Yea my name is Nicole
And I've been rapping for about 5 months now
I'm 14
And yea
okay so I'll say if your a girl your pretty good. if your pretending and are really a guy, thats just creepy.lol Do you know Mr Flames? your rhymes are a lil more advanced than his, but the creepy thing is you have the EXACT same location...lol

Since: Jan 13

Location hidden

#30130 Feb 1, 2013
Godess wrote:
Bum so big people say I make an earthquake
No I ain't fat it's just that my assfake
I just wanna say than I'm an alpha prey
So if you smart trust me just back away
See I'm a badasss I don't show up on Father's Day :D
Yes I act cute but beware I know how to shoot
Now stfu before I have to chuck my boot D:
See I love everyone give u the green card
But let's not disgaurd that flames flow sounds like he a retard
Forget sunscreen u lil preteen
Are u already forgetting I'm the queen
See mr flames stop with them blames
Your rap sounds gay u should be ashamed
Yea my name is Nicole
And I've been rapping for about 5 months now
I'm 14
And yea
Another hater o.lo
Some Random Dude

Post Falls, ID

#30131 Feb 1, 2013
@Mulisha

This quote from you right here is why I went off on you.

"but the minute 1 of you punks speaks my name expect retaliation from an advanced lyricist.."

You started off on me I retaliated. I give respect to those that give it. It's a mutual thing.
Some Random Dude

Post Falls, ID

#30132 Feb 1, 2013
@Shini

I would like to battle you again. Every time I battle you and H.H.H. breaks it down and gives advice I improve a lot as far as being able to simplify it in a way people get it.

I bet you can back me up on that.
Godess

Courtice, Canada

#30133 Feb 1, 2013
MrFlames wrote:
<quoted text>
Another hater o.lo
Lol flames don't get me wrong I think ur good better than me probably
Shini

Korea

#30135 Feb 1, 2013
Join the diss Arcane cypher!!

Since: Aug 12

Location hidden

#30136 Feb 1, 2013
Some Random Dude wrote:
@Mulisha
This quote from you right here is why I went off on you.
"but the minute 1 of you punks speaks my name expect retaliation from an advanced lyricist.."
You started off on me I retaliated. I give respect to those that give it. It's a mutual thing.
retaliation meaning Id write a verse to body them.. So is that what Ur doing?

Since: Jan 13

Location hidden

#30137 Feb 1, 2013
Mulisha okay I admit i need help but I'm trying and it's hard when I have so much on me right now

Since: Dec 12

Staten Island, NY

#30138 Feb 1, 2013
And I'm better than both lol
Thanks for the votes and goddess vote on my battle. Two hours for my bday. 15 :D

Since: Jan 13

Location hidden

#30139 Feb 1, 2013
Mulisha made wrote:
<quoted text>
okay so I'll say if your a girl your pretty good. if your pretending and are really a guy, thats just creepy.lol Do you know Mr Flames? your rhymes are a lil more advanced than his, but the creepy thing is you have the EXACT same location...lol
Lol we go to the same school ^:3 I have pictures

Since: Jan 13

Location hidden

#30140 Feb 1, 2013
Mulisha made wrote:
<quoted text>
okay so I'll say if your a girl your pretty good. if your pretending and are really a guy, thats just creepy.lol Do you know Mr Flames? your rhymes are a lil more advanced than his, but the creepy thing is you have the EXACT same location...lol
sorry if i didnt intruduce myself im niole i was the one who taught flameshow to rap sadly i did i bad job and im on his account he told me to check out his raps that he made and yea if u dont believe me i hav pictures :3

Since: Jan 13

Location hidden

#30141 Feb 1, 2013
nicole *sighs* such a dumbass

Since: Jan 13

Location hidden

#30142 Feb 1, 2013
wow fk this bullshit ^ -_-

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