Shini VS SomeRandomDude (Yet another ...
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Shini

Seoul, Korea

#21 Nov 9, 2013
SomeRandomDude wrote:
Puns, similes, metaphors
I forgot metaphores when I posted, but honestly no one really rates puns or similes. Puns can be considered a form of wordplay simulies can be incorporated in the punchline category because you usually need a simile or metaphor of sorts to make a decent set-up/punch.

Most other forums are the same way.
Hannibal Barca

Singapore, Singapore

#22 Nov 9, 2013
Okay Shini has put a lot of thought into this spit and tried to add in a lot of clever wordplay, like his Japanese name and stuff... But It seems that something this good and this well thought of HAS to be something very old that you keep going back to and revamping it
SRD I like your way of rapping more than Shini but I wasn't feeling it from you on this one. I have seen your pasts posts and I love them all, you are in my opinion the best rapper on this forum but you did not have much motivation on this one. Your wordplay was there but it was too shallow. When compared to shini's, yours can be understood on the spot while shini's word play takes time to kick in (if that's possible) which gives a sick after effect.
Good enough explanation?
liquidflow

Desert Hot Springs, CA

#23 Nov 10, 2013
shini u won every aspect in this battle no need to break much smoother everything u just killed em with multis, much smoother transitions and overall i could re read ur flow cause it was enjoyable props to u
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#24 Nov 13, 2013
Bump for voting.
SomeRandomDude

United States

#25 Nov 14, 2013
Hannibal Barca wrote:
SRD I like your way of rapping more than Shini but I wasn't feeling it from you on this one. I have seen your pasts posts and I love them all, you are in my opinion the best rapper on this forum
I thought no one liked the complexity. I am trying right now to mix in imagery, story telling, complexity, simplicity and a new aspect.

I have a few new things I am trying to figure out, but I have no clue how to go about it. Once I figure it out though, I think it will bring me a step further.

I also have to figure out how to step up punchlines so they hit harder.
SomeRandomDude

United States

#26 Nov 14, 2013
I want a re-match. However, what I was trying to figure out is some of what you are doing. I want to be able to use as much crazy wordplay as you got. No idea how to do it, but I am going to try it out.

I sure you understand what I am referring too.

You know the reference, the ref heard ends, bet her bent, waist to let their gents, make a better fence, to sit on lettered pens.

Plus much more, I see it and I want to figure out how to do it. There is much you can do to mix that up and I want to take advantage of it.
Hannibal Barca

Singapore, Singapore

#27 Nov 14, 2013
Yup I agree with you srd, complexity is not liked by many people as they don't really appreciate it and they rap with easy structures hence they ignore complexity. Eminem is an example of this. Eminem uses so much complexity and puns and word play like cutting words in half and using names and puns. In my opinion, that's why he is the best rapper. Tupac, the notorious B.I.G and eminem are just the best. Tupac and biggie didn't use that much complexity but they has word play and personality. You have potential srd but you're not using it.
YOU'VE BOUGHT A FERRARI BUT YOU'RE DRIVING IT LIKE A FIAT...
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#28 Nov 29, 2013
We need votes here.
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#29 Dec 5, 2013
Smh Bumping again for votes.
MBb

South Africa

#30 Dec 6, 2013
I'll vote between Shini And SRD when i get time, until then GUYS keep up THE GREAT WORK........
MBb

Europe

#31 Dec 6, 2013
I will break this, this way. i will start with each catagory and i will give you a point(s) on how you did on that catagory out of 5 points
SRD
Flow:
The flow for me was a bit poor cause i find it hard to rap your verse but anyway you can still work that out, so i'll give that's 3/5
Multies:(Plastic is elastic,Drastic attack,lack vituals and so on... and you were great on that so 4/5
WordPlay:
You're wordplay was amazing like "A corkscrew to remove the cock so you're screwed, overflowing with issues, i swear your dellusional,because ya whole play blew away POOF and the following EXPO was great too so that is 4/5
NamePlay:
There were no much nameplay!.I think there was a line like this "A TEN SHIN"
I think you were reffering to Shini so that was excellent, 3/5
Rhyme Scheme:
I tried my best to find your rhyme scheme since a rhyme scheme is a pattern between lines of a song so you lacked that but your rhymes were fab so that will be 2/5
Punchlines:Your closing had some good punches so that will be
Enjoyment:4/5
I think enjoyment comes from your flowing and your smoothness of your flow but since that wasn't great i will give you 2/5
Metaphors:
Well done on this catagory i've found so many metaphors and i think there is no need to go through them, maybe i should (I'm laoding this double barrel shotgun with slugs, you keeping
And my fiery heart will engult your entire flames, so stop pretending.....
So 5/5 will do it.
So for SRD that's it but man you're were so amazing i just wanna say keep up the good work and out of 40 you are 27
So i will have to go through Shini's verse, so give me 5....
MBb

Europe

#32 Dec 6, 2013
Shini
Flow:
Man that was crazy i mean even though i didn't get what you were sayin' until i've gone through your Expo, i repeatedly rap that verse like 4 times, so it is enough for a 5/5
Multies:
(Great here,rape here,slayed here,hate fear.and till to battle males and like so on....4/5
WordPlay:
(You're clashing with a smarther King Aurther
Author acting born the ya laughable
Tryin' to be tactical marty-ya the rappin' Joan of ace..........and more)
and 5/5
NamePlay:
I did not find any so no need to rate that...
Rhyme scheme:There some goes to you too but judging on how you rhymed i'll say 3/5..
Punchlines:
(WAR against this gay WHORE gaylord who HATE FOR anything that rhymes with EIGHT-FOUR also a Wordplay.4/5
Enjoyment:......5/5
Metaphors:
So many metaphors like(Like you're clashin' witha smarther King Arther and damn there so many so 4/5
Shini good, crazy work.Out of 40 you are 30...
You were great man.....
MBb

Europe

#33 Dec 6, 2013
..........MVGT--Shini
Just wanna say NamePlay,Rhyme or wether it is a rhyme scheme, it is important but all of you guys were amazing and i wish someday that i would go against one of you, even though i would probably lose but that's okey because i just started writing like 5 months ago but i'm getting better everyday.....
MBb

Europe

#34 Dec 6, 2013
There's some few spelling and grammer mistakes but will try to fix that.....
SomeRandomDude

Denver, CO

#35 Dec 7, 2013
What do you f***ing know, you can actually voted and know what the f*** you are talking about! By the way, this is a thread and freestyle is another thread. The Hip-Hop section is a forum and you can make a new thread in the page overlooking all of these.

By the way, Shini, your name for one is a b**** to work with. I do want to have a some history battles though.:) I have to keep improving, keep up my puns, use the rhyme to create rhythm and flow as well as using juxtapositioning to help enphasize.
Shini

Seoul, Korea

#36 Dec 7, 2013
MBb wrote:
Shini
Flow:
Man that was crazy i mean even though i didn't get what you were sayin' until i've gone through your Expo, i repeatedly rap that verse like 4 times, so it is enough for a 5/5
Multies:
(Great here,rape here,slayed here,hate fear.and till to battle males and like so on....4/5
WordPlay:
(You're clashing with a smarther King Aurther
Author acting born the ya laughable
Tryin' to be tactical marty-ya the rappin' Joan of ace..........and more)
and 5/5
NamePlay:
I did not find any so no need to rate that...
Rhyme scheme:There some goes to you too but judging on how you rhymed i'll say 3/5..
Punchlines:
(WAR against this gay WHORE gaylord who HATE FOR anything that rhymes with EIGHT-FOUR also a Wordplay.4/5
Enjoyment:......5/5
Metaphors:
So many metaphors like(Like you're clashin' witha smarther King Arther and damn there so many so 4/5
Shini good, crazy work.Out of 40 you are 30...
You were great man.....
Actually I nameplayed myself.

Dude is on Shin in front of the papacy. It was a double entendre.

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