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Since: May 12

Westlake, OH

#1 May 4, 2012
I wrote this poem and would like your thoughts on it. Thanks.

Angel Wings
I found i was pregnant and was so proud
Later I found out she was gone on the wing of a dove
My heart broke a little to know I would never see
The twinkle in your eyes
The smile on your face
I would never hear your first cry
Oh how it breaks my heart
You would have been mommy's first true love
The only one with all my heart
Take my soul with you keep it flying high
Because my love for you will never die..

By Samantha Wilson
Edison Knight


#2 May 4, 2012
Hey, Samantha, sorry about your loss. I have an english degree and am also a poet, so I will try to help. Do want all of the poem to rhyme? If so, you need to think about a rhyme scheme such as abab or aabb. Also you should consider meter. The meter in this poem is not constant. However, all poems do not have to rhyme or have meter. I believe a good poem should have powerful lines and tell a story. One hint is to avoid cliches. Another is to review and practice. Just keep at it, you are on the right track.

Since: May 12

Westlake, OH

#3 May 5, 2012
thanks Edison for your reply. I write them as them come out. I don't do it really to make them rhyme. I will take your advise and work on them some more thanks

Elkhorn City, KY

#4 May 5, 2012
1. Keep flipping burgers.
2. Its spelled "input". No one will ever take you seriously if you can spell words you should have learned in 3rd grade.
3. Write about things that don't sound like a crappy country music pop song or something from a failed hometown southern gospel band.

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