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alarmclock

Honolulu, HI

#1 Oct 19, 2007
17 syllables in 3 lines of
5 syllables, 7 syllables, 5 syllables

Example:
__________
Calm haiku debate.
But I have not forgotten
Superferry looms.
__________
or
_________
Stream seems different.
SuperFerry leaving in distance.
Oh, river rocks missing.
Cat Manapua

Saint George, UT

#2 Oct 19, 2007
alarmclock wrote:
17 syllables in 3 lines of
5 syllables, 7 syllables, 5 syllables
Example:
_________
Stream seems different.
SuperFerry leaving in distance.
Oh, river rocks missing.
Uh, you need to learn to count your syllables better. Your example is 5 - 9 - 6 you idiot.
Frank Lee

Honolulu, HI

#3 Oct 19, 2007
congragation
invade hippie hermit home
permit required
Melancholy

Honolulu, HI

#4 Oct 19, 2007
I knew someone would eventually bring the number of syllables up..LOL I thought it waas 5-7-5 as well.

Oh WELL
Melancholy

Honolulu, HI

#5 Oct 19, 2007
It is 5-7-5 LOL
rubbahslippah

Honolulu, HI

#6 Oct 19, 2007
Brah quick park da truck
Gotta return imu rock
Auwe! Ranger wen spock us

I tried :)
rubbahslippah

Honolulu, HI

#7 Oct 19, 2007
Sorry - correction:

Brah quick park da truck
Gotta return imu rock
Auwe Ranger stay
No one wins

Kaneohe, HI

#8 Oct 19, 2007
built for the locals
met with car pounding protests
again we suffer
Harley

Kapaa, HI

#9 Oct 19, 2007
rubbahslippah wrote:
Sorry - correction:
Brah quick park da truck
Gotta return imu rock
Auwe Ranger stay
Either one is good!
alarmclock

Honolulu, HI

#10 Oct 19, 2007
Cat Manapua wrote:
<quoted text>
Uh, you need to learn to count your syllables better. Your example is 5 - 9 - 6 you idiot.
Yes, haiku police,
I know. I'm an idiot.
Can't count syllables.
alarmclock

Honolulu, HI

#11 Oct 19, 2007
I was in a hurry to leave this morning and rushed it. Pasted a working version. Difficult to translate from the original Japanese in which I am working. Just kidding. But thanks for checking in.

_______

Brief, clear, enlightened,
like too few opinions here-
Haiku debate rules.
alarmclock

Honolulu, HI

#12 Oct 19, 2007
Correct version was:

Stream seems different.
Ferry leaving in distance.
Oh, river rocks gone.

sigh.
alarmclock

Honolulu, HI

#13 Oct 19, 2007
With nothing to lose
big Oahu ONLY gains.
Neighbors get impacts.
alarmclock

Honolulu, HI

#14 Oct 19, 2007
Bring on your haiku
you superferry lovers.
That is if you dare.
Frank Lee

Haiku, HI

#15 Oct 19, 2007
I like go hana
stay hale a kea la
stay no mo da kine
Me Ouch

Honolulu, HI

#18 Oct 20, 2007
Cat Manapua wrote:
<quoted text>
Uh, you need to learn to count your syllables better. Your example is 5 - 9 - 6 you idiot.
Cat Manapua,
Sharp eyed roadkill in a bun,
Didn't see car though.
Oooh Ouch

Honolulu, HI

#19 Oct 20, 2007
alarmclock wrote:
<quoted text>
Yes, haiku police,
I know. I'm an idiot.
Can't count syllables.
Don't be alarmed clock,
Time flies when you're having fun,
Keep swinging your hands.
Owwie

Honolulu, HI

#20 Oct 20, 2007
Melancholy wrote:
It is 5-7-5 LOL
So sweet and yet sad,
Why you so melancholy?
The Superfolly?
Terminal

Honolulu, HI

#21 Oct 20, 2007
Linda Lingus wrote:
Pain in my rear hurts
From prolonged attempt to pull
My head out of it
So naughty your tongue,
Nasty foreplay with her name.
You need a lickin'.
Heh Heh

Honolulu, HI

#22 Oct 20, 2007
So coincidence!
Busted wit da imu rocks.
(Uncle wen plant dem.)

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