A Short Story Chapter 1

A Short Story Chapter 1

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TheWriter

Elkhart, IN

#1 Jan 27, 2014
I am going to bring a little something different to the table. Every so often, I am going
to be writing and presenting chapters of a short story until it is finished. I am usually a mystery writer, so this may be how the story unfolds. I am not a writer by profession, but it is always something I loved to do and did some dabbling with in high school and college. I hope some of you enjoy it. Please join in and write a story or poem of your own if you wish. Thank you all and I welcome any compliments/criticism of my work.

"Midnight"

The clock struck midnight as the fierce prevailing winds shook and rattled the windows of
my small ranch home on Hoover Street. The rain had been coming down in torrents for the
last three days. The howling and blowing had been keeping me awake all night. It wasn't
much different than what I expected for this time of year, but the rain had been
especially heavy this week. I had a lot on my mind this evening- you know those nights, the kind where your mind races. It had been especially tough since Kathy left. I couldn't stop thinking about the arguments we had, and what I could have done different to salvage some part of this relationship. I tried, we tried for 10 years. At a certain point it seems, there
isn't much more you can do to make a relationship work that just isn't meant to be. I had
to face the facts, and it was hard. The insomnia had been getting worse since she left 2
months ago, and it was a common ritual for me to stay up until 3 am every night. I had a
coffee cup in my hand and more brewing in the pot- I knew that undoubtedly wasn't the best
thing to do when you couldn't sleep, but I just couldn't seem to keep myself from enjoying
that freshly brewed coffee smell.

My coffee cup was getting low now, and the howling wind relentless- shaking these old
windows and the droplets of rain pinging off them almost in a musical fashion- it was 1
am. I wasn't much of a TV watcher, and over time I found that just sitting in the recliner
in silence afforded for some of the best soul searching I have ever done in my life. It
wasn't easy getting out of this recliner because of my back problems. I was one of the
unfortunate who sustained a back injury in the service. I hadn't worked for years, but the
disability check allowed me to live a modest life. The smell of the coffee beckoned me
however, and these old tired bones shuffled to the kitchen counter.

The window above the sink afforded a good view of my modest back yard. It was dark, except
for the small porch light which illuminated part of my back yard and a portion of several
neighbor's yards. I didn't know my neighbors very well. The man and woman next to me
hardly ever came out of the home, they appeared to be in their 60's. Other than that, I
occasionally caught a rare glimpse of the woman behind me as she emptied her trash every Tuesday in the alley, she appeared to be in her 30's. I have been living here for 6 months, and in reality it was some of my responsibility to be a friendly type- you know, go over and at
least offer an initial greeting and get to know these people. However, I have always been
shy and felt that it was part of their responsibility to great me as the "new neighbor."

This was a pretty typical Midwest town. Rows and rows of bungalows, ranches and two
stories built circa 1900-1960's. The yards were small, and some of the homes were in
disrepair. I liked living here however, and the rent was right. The rain was starting to
ease a bit now and I could see the homes across the ally and the homes next to me on
either side. It appeared everyone was asleep except me. With that thought, I poured myself
another cup of coffee and returned to my recliner.

Chapter 2 coming soon

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real observations

Elizabethtown, IN

#2 Jan 27, 2014
yawn... didnt know topix was for crap like this.
So True

Frankfort, IN

#3 Jan 27, 2014
Interesting how certain stories keep disappearing about recent criminal events that is public record keep disappearing from these forums.
TheWriter

Elkhart, IN

#4 Jan 27, 2014
real observations wrote:
yawn... didnt know topix was for crap like this.
Sorry you feel it's crap.. then go back to bickering with each other and name calling and I'll leave.
UNO

Chicago, IL

#5 Jan 28, 2014
TheWriter wrote:
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Sorry you feel it's crap.. then go back to bickering with each other and name calling and I'll leave.
Do not mind what others think, if they do not like what you write they do not have to read it. I personally enjoy reading things other than slander on this site. Continue with a light heart and stand firm on your desire to write :) never allow anybody to dismiss your passion!
InTheMist

Elkhart, IN

#6 Jan 29, 2014
real observations wrote:
yawn... didnt know topix was for crap like this.
Write what you want. Free speech remember? Last time I read the "rules" it didn't say anything about what to write as long as you're trying to be respectful in doing so. If you don't like what is here, then read something else. Just like changing a television channel, nobody forces it down your throat. There is plenty of slandering, name calling and stupid crap on here. Why slam this person?? I'll tell you why.... just another hater.... bump your I.Q up a few notches and maybe you'll appreciate something other than the mundane crap that is thrown out here everyday. Continue on "Writer" and be not intimidated by the boorish.
just wondering

United States

#7 Feb 2, 2014
real observations wrote:
yawn... didnt know topix was for crap like this.
is this boring to you because you would rather see drama,cursing,trash and other negativity?*shaking my head*
InTheMist

Elkhart, IN

#8 Feb 3, 2014
just wondering wrote:
<quoted text> is this boring to you because you would rather see drama,cursing,trash and other negativity?*shaking my head*
Agreed, I am sure they are just waiting for Jerry Springer to come on....
Silence

Mooresville, IN

#9 Feb 7, 2014
I am wondering where you are going to go with it. Im far from a professional, arm chair reader only.
I too always thought writing short stories would be interesting. Even entertained the notion of taking on a creative wrting course. For my enjoyment.
I do think a lot of time of spent with the sound of the rain and storm constantly being heard, but not the emotion the sound evoked in him, ever was hinted at or revealed.

Whens chapt.2
TheWriter

Elkhart, IN

#10 Feb 15, 2014
Silence wrote:
I am wondering where you are going to go with it. Im far from a professional, arm chair reader only.
I too always thought writing short stories would be interesting. Even entertained the notion of taking on a creative wrting course. For my enjoyment.
I do think a lot of time of spent with the sound of the rain and storm constantly being heard, but not the emotion the sound evoked in him, ever was hinted at or revealed.
Whens chapt.2
you're right I spend a lot of time talking about the weather, while not describing how it makes him feel. Would make a difference if I incorporate that will do so and 2nd chapter will be coming soon thank you

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