i wrote this poem for my boyfriend. what do u think? is it any good?

[Friiend]

WRITE MORE SHANTISE!!!!!!!!!!

[short_b]

Shantisa wrote:

f*ck you all who are negative.
i cant write love poems.
except wen thier about jason [= oh yeah betches.
i can only write depressed sh*t so back off.
i dont need no d*mn classes.i dont write for you people to be entertained.i write cuz it helps meh express myself.

I can relate to what you're saying about being kind of suicidal and not being able to write love poems. I was the same way when I was a teen. You'll grow out of it. Ignore the negativity, unless you want to use it as inspiration.=]

[kiran]

i love all dese poems der jst d write once 4 d 1 in my lifexxxx

[lauren]

omg you are so good it reminds me of my boyfreind jake he loved me so much and i loved him

[me and hunter nunley]

WOW!!!!!!!!!! THOSE POEMS ARE AWSOME AND THEY FIT ME AND MY BOYFRIEND PERFECTLY AND I WENT OUT WITHA DUDE AND HE MOVED TO INDIA IN LESS THAN 20 DAYS!!!! y? Y IS LIFE SO TRAGIC?

[SINGLE]

HE MADE HER JEALOUS ON PURPOSE HE TRIED WHEN THE GIRL ASKED DO YOU LOVE ME ON PURPOSE HE LIED HE PLAYED WITH JEALOUSY LIKE IT WAS A GAME LITTLE DID HE KNOW THINGS WOULD NOT BE THE SAME AS TIME WENT BY HE NEVER KNEW HOW THINGS WOULDGO WRONG THE DAMAGE HE WOULD ONE NIGHT THE GIRL BROKE DOWN FEELING VERY ALONE JUST HER AND HER BLADE NO ONE ELSE WAS HIME SHE DAILED HIS NUMBER HE SAID HELLO SHE TOLD HIUM SHE LOVED HIM HUNG UP THE PHONE HE RACED TO HER HOUSE JUST A MINUTE TO LATE FOUND HER LYING IN BLOOD HER HEART HAD NO RATE IN HER HAND READ A NOTE ABOUT HER LOVE THIS BOY HER ONLY OBBSESSIPN AS HE READ THE NOTE HE KNELT DOWN AND CRIED THE KNIFE THAT NIGHT THEY BOTH DIED IN THE NOTE HIS HAND-WRITNING READ I LOVED HER TO SHE NEVER KNEW ALL THIS TIME I LOVED HER TO

[tegan]

omg god you are good i sent it to my boy and he is just like god u r good and hopes that you keep on going caus it is really good.
I wish i could write like you

[Kiandra Jones]

Ireally like the poems

[MZ-LOLLIPOP]

COOL IM STEALING IT.........LOL

[crystal]

i think that it is really good!!!

[Shantisa]

wow...thanks alot for all the comments =] you guys are the best and i hope you keep readin =]
idk if i posted this one or not...i havent been on in awhile but here it is anyways...

Razor blade tears
fall down my face
never ending lies
that no one can erase

The darkness devours me
the sun burns through my skin
this life is just a game
&& its impossible to win

Painful memories
that wont go away
your skies are blue
but mine are still gray

what is happiness
when your smiles are all fake
i gave you my whole heart
please don't let it break

I'd give up my life
if it meant yours was saved
you told me you love me
&& in my heart it was engraved

baby i wish i could show you
how you make me feel
you make me feel alive
god i hope this love is real

every night before i sleep
i lay down in my bed
i close my eyes && think
about all the things you've said

i begin to pray
that you && i will last
i start to cry
the tears come down fast

i don't want to lose you
never again
but don't worry baby
I'll still love you past the end

i want to hold you
&& give you all my love
I'm so lucky to have you
your like an angel from above

this smile that i wear
is all thanks to you
if you ever left again
i swear i don't know what I'd do

oh i love you so much
your my shooting star
you lift me oh so high
&& you take me very far

baby don't you know
that your the only one
who can make me feel this way
in my world,your better than the sun

if you could only see
the things i see in you
you have a spell on me
that no one can ever undo

you are the air i breathe
your all that i need
our love is a story
that I'd happily reread

we've gone through a lot
but we can go through much more
our love is full of dangers
but I'm ready to explore

i need you in my life
take care of my heart
you can help it heal
but you can also tear it apart

baby don't you see
your everything to me
without you i couldn't breathe
without you I'd only bleed

I LOVE YOU JASON TIEN HUU LE <3

[Shantisa]

heres another one...

I'll cut till i reach a vein
cut until i cant feel the pain
I'll push the razor into my wrist
all because i couldn't handle this

I'll bleed till i decide to give up
bleed until I've finally had enough
I'll let the blood drip onto the floor
just because i don't care anymore

I'll cry till my tears dry
cry until I'm ready to die
I'll stand here as the tears fall
all because you forgot to call

I'll let you hurt me till i cant take no more
hurt me until i fall to the floor
I'll be quiet,i wont make a sound
even if there's no one around

I'll love you till my heart completely breaks
love you until I've had all i can take
I'll fake this smile one last time for you
but only because i don't know what else to do

I'll fall till someone catches me
fall until you set me free
I'll wipe away the tears from my face
but not because i belong in this place

I'll need you till i take my last breath
need you until i have nothing else left
I'll want you till i want nothing else
only because its all I've really felt

I'll torture my heart till i go insane
torture it until i cant stand the pain
I'll be dead inside for the rest of my life
all because your lies are like a knife.

[Shantisa]

heres one more since i was gone for so long...

The gun in her hand
as she sits there alone
waiting for someone to walk in
but nobody's home.

She takes a deep breath
puts the gun to her head
pulls the trigger
she is now dead.

Pills in his hands
as he dies inside
he wants to come out
but all he does is hide.

He smiles that fake smile
and shoves the pills down his throat
heaven is so far away
but god just watched him choke.

Razor in her hand
as a tear falls down her cheek
shes fighting against death
but shes just too weak.

She cries one last tear
brings the razor to her wrist
pushes down deep
shes had enough of this.

Rope in his hand
as he smiles to himself
nobody understands
all the pain he's felt.

He takes one last look around
puts the rope around his neck
he swinging back and forth
and there goes his final breath.

The edge of the mountain is in view
as he tightly holds her hand
they tried to explain to everyone
but nobody will ever understand.

They smile at each other
as tears escape their eyes
walk right off the cliff
together,their love dies.

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