i wrote this poem for my boyfriend. what do u think? is it any good?

[A Creative Writing Major]

Please take a class or read some poems out of books. Keep trying but this is not what most poets call poems. Poetry is hard stuff. Ask anyone who takes classes. Enjoy writing, but please read poetry before writing it.

[DUDE]

HAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA PYSCHO GURL MANE

[cornelious]

this poem sux

[cornelious]

i think you should give it up cuz u cant write 4 sh#t it jus straight up licks azz and it sux virgin p#ssy

[cornelious]

b#tch u suck

[UNKNOWN POET]

Shantisa wrote:

thankyou all.im kinda in a suicidal mode rite now so srry if i dont get on much </3

YOUR POETRY IS A BEAUTIFUL WORK OF ART. EXPRESS YOURSELF. SOMETIMES WE WRITE OUR BEST WHEN WE ARE DEPRESSED. TAKE COMFORT IN THAT YOU ARE VERY TALENTED. YOU WILL FIND SOMEONE WHO WILL LOVE YOU AS YOU WANT TO BE LOVED, YOUR TOO SPECIAL TO GIVE UP.
I AM TOO AFRAID TO USE MY REAL NAME FOR NOW.
SHANTISA, YOUR ART IS VERY DEEP, PLEASE POST MORE.

HERE'S MY LATEST POEM... MAY IT COMFORT YOU....

“ THE WIND”

LISTEN TO THE HOWLING WIND, MANY TALES DOES IT KNOW.
FOR OVER THE SANDS OF TIME, IT BLEW A LONG TIME AGO.
CHURCH BELLS ARE RINGING IN THE DISTANCE, THE WIND IS BLOWING THEM HARD.
THOUGH THE CHURCH DOORS ARE CLOSED, A CROWD GATHERS IN THE YARD.
A DREAMCATCHER IS CAUGHT IN THE WIND, WHILE HANGING UPON A TREE.
FLOWING WITHIN A GENTLE MOTION , SO EVER GRACEFULLY.
THE WIND CRADLES THE FALLING RAIN, CAUSING IT TO GLIDE.
WHILE UPON THE LEAVES OF THE TREES , THE RAIN DROPS START TO SLIDE.
SO MYSTERIOUS IS THE WIND, FROM WHERE DOES IT COME?
WHERE DOES THE WIND GO, WHENEVER IT IS DONE ?

ONLY THE LORD KNOWS THAT ANSWER…………

[Shantisa]

f*ck you all who are negative.
i cant write love poems.
except wen thier about jason [= oh yeah betches.
i can only write depressed sh*t so back off.
i dont need no d*mn classes.i dont write for you people to be entertained.i write cuz it helps meh express myself.

[anymous]

i love your poems

[kiana]

i love your peom!!!! itz awsome!!!!!!!!

[kiana]

i love your peom!!!!!!!!itz awsome!!!!!!!!

[kiana]

i love your peom!!!!!!!!

[Shantisa]

The pain that i feel
just wont go away
every time i try to leave
you convince me to stay!

i just don't understand
why do you have to lie
I'm sick of everything
please just let me die!

let me slit my throat
let me bleed onto the floor
just stop pretending to care
i cant take this anymore!

let the darkness invade my soul
I'll soon be filled with hate
please don't try to stop me
just let hell open its gate!

you said we'd last forever
that was just another lie
keep on saying your sorry
but please don't make me cry!

the more you say you love me
the more i open my heart
you say you cant lose me
but you tore me apart!

if you really loved me
you wouldn't of done this
but its done & its not over
the blade goes across my wrist!

the past always repeats itself
its never gone forever
you killed me inside..
but i thought we loved each other!

i really really love you
it was my heart that you stole
the more you lied to me
the more you destroyed my soul!

i cant believe i trusted you
forever doesn't last
i cant believe i loved you
now please disappear into my past </3

[danielle barnes]

i think your a big NOB HEAD and need help and your poems are folse and shit xxxxxx

[joe]

barrels of my heart i thrust upon you,
just ordinary casks of mighty oak i lay before you.
their swelling never seizing,
their thumping yet increasing,
deceasing never wanting,
yet for your heart
they gladly die a thousand glorious deaths repeating.
fondly do i yet remember,
the dying of each ember,
and the harshness of the long decembers,
and the knowing of the gladder times that’s yet to come.
a carpenter was i,
unskilled in many arts,
i did all i knew to do,
though crudely made,
i give my heart to you

[SiiNDY]

Dem i love ur POEM IT GOT 2 ME ITS FREAKIN BOMB=]]

[kensi zeck]

amazing

[Ashley]

I loved your poem d*** wat them haters said about it cause you will always have somebody tryin to bring you down!!! I can completly understand where you are coming from girl!!! but keep doing wat you doing!!![KEEP YOUR HEAD UP]

[emo hope]

i love dis i can relate to everything you wrote

[NO ONE]

Mommy of four wrote:

I jotted a poem down real quick on the bad poem thread...

shantisa can you please post more poems.. your poems is beautiful!!!!! when i read your poems it relates so much to my life

[Friiend]

i love your poems so much they are so meaningful!!!!!