i wrote this poem for my boyfriend. what do u think? is it any good?
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“Holding on to my everything <3”
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who knew i'd fall in love again
i never thought i'd see this day i guess my heart has learned to forgive and the thoughts of 'him' are fading away you dont know how you make me feel every word you say brings a smile to my heart your my everything and i love you so much i hope that we never fall apart I wish i could be there with you i wanna make you happy i'll do whatever it takes to make us better than any love story god you drive me crazy waiting for you to get online but it doesnt matter cuz im so lucky that your mine i dont care how far away you are that doesnt stop me from wanting to kiss you i wanna hear you laugh again our love is a spell that no one can undo your amazing and i feel you should know it your forever in my dreams i love you so much but have no idea how to show it getting you out of mind is harder than it seems do you even feel the same way? no ones ever really loved me i hope you dont think im strange but god you make me so happy you make my life so much better and becuz of you i dont wanna die god i hope you love me too everytime i think of you i start to cry i just hate going through so much pain please dont hurt me i dont think i could go through it agian without you i feel so unhappy i just want you to know that i love you with all of my heart and i want you to trust me like i trust you and maybe someday our love will be like art I LOVE YOU NATHAN!!! <333333333333 |
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You are a poet of great passion good job of composing.
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“Holding on to my everything <3”
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i also wrote this : Her life is pointless full of pain and agony this knife is hurtful oh so bloody you could never imagine all the tears she's cried life feels like a rollercoaster and its forced her along for the ride she's becoming weak as she cuts into her vein she lets it bleed and absorbs all the pain this is how her life is each day is the same her tears they come and go but the scars are to remain |
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lord you are really good
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“Holding on to my everything <3”
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thx :) |
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I LOVE YOUR POEM I WRITTE POEMS 2 IS SO STRANGE 2 FIND SOME ONE THAT WRITTES SIMMILAR TO ME AM SO IN LOVE WITH THAT POEM IS BEUTIFULL GOD BLESS UR TALENT
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Very good poem |
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good job u go u good thing that was awesome as i feel the same way to keep going u good thing :)
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“Holding on to my everything <3”
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you wanna hear more?
here: With this paper and this pen I'll write down how i feel you'll be the only ones that know that my smiles are never real i don't write suicide notes cause there all stored in my head if someone doesn't do something soon you'll all wake up and find me dead this knife is the only thing that makes me feel alive but when i put it down i feel so dead inside Pain doesn't hurt if it's all you've ever felt they think I'm doing fine but I'm about to kill myself |
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I think you need help if your writing stuff like this.
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“Vince is da Man! ”
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WOW! If you and NAthan ever break up and you are my age, call 555 (just kidding! I wish you and Nathan the best :o) |
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“Vince is da Man! ”
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__________ Hey kiddo, this is NOT an insult to you, but please look for guidance okay? You seem like a sweet kid. Let me try and cheer you up a little... __________ (A not too good poem from me, but I try, lol!) I love jazz and Bassist Ray Brown, For his trio and more I'd walk a mile, So let me try and take your frown, and replace it with a big ole' smile. I'm not the greatest poet on earth, But I will try to give you a little mirth. Sit down sweety and hear a poem of grace, You don't have to leave the human race. Don't you dare say goodbye, Nor say that you will die, I know you have a big ole sigh, But get up on those angel wings and fly. Sadness can be hard that's true, But keep going, and fight the rue. You shall be in my prayers my friend, and to your heart my love I send. __________ I posted this poem for someone else too, but I think you can use a little cheering, okay? You look fairly young in your avatar, I am not young so don't break up with Nathan, lol! Enjoy life, coscientiously try to think happy thoughts. Flowers, green grass, beautiful POSITIVE poetry, summer breeze...so much to be happy about kiddo, okay?:o) |
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“Vince is da Man! ”
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Oh my, and How good this is! I'm not your caliber poet, but I can recognize good poetry when I see it. I will definitely check out your link, thank you! |
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“Holding on to my everything <3”
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im already getting help but i dont need it |
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“Holding on to my everything <3”
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lol we already did break up cuz hes moving to japan :( |
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“Holding on to my everything <3”
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why thankyou :) |
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“Vince is da Man! ”
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Well, I'm glad you are getting help. I, and I could tell others also, we're REALLY concerned. You are young, there will be others...maybe possibly Nathan will return! You never know! You definitely have a beautiful talent for poetry (Even though the last few were incredibly morbid, they were well done). Can you do a poem...hmmm.... lets's say, about another subject? How about a favorite pet? You're favorite holiday? Do you have a car?-(LOL! I know that's a wierd subject for a poem. I still haven't found a word that rhymes with carburator.) I have a poem site you may be interested in. It's right here on Topics. I'll be right back. I'll cut and paste it for you! |
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“Vince is da Man! ”
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Darn! She took her poems off her forum. This Lady named Grace Nerissa had some original poems on her own forum. They're not listed now and I don't know where to find them.
I'll be back. I go to work, but will try to write you a funny poem about my car in a couple of days. And remember: You are not crazy or anything for getting help. These last few poems you wrote really showed you do need Help. Did your parents read your poems? Hang tough, kiddo. You will feel better and things will work out.:o) |
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i think that she or he is really good i also write good poetry so inthe future look for me in a book
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“Vince is da Man! ”
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Good morning, Shantisa!
I brought you a link that you may get a kick out of, lol! We're being goofballs on the thread. Feel free to join in! Only rule is it's got to be a really BAD poem, not filthy but ...well, you'll get the idea when you see it.:o) Anyone else want to join in, please feel free! http://www.topix.net/forum/arts/poetry/TTQ7BQ... |
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